In recent years, there has been a growing concern about how to increase students’ social engagement. This has led to a suggestion that volunteer work should be integrated into high school courses. In my opinion, this constructive idea is completely viable despite some manageable demerits.
Admittedly, volunteering consumes students’ too much energy, which prevents students from concentrating on one serious thing, particularly their academic study. It is reported that high school students find it challenging to juggle voluntary work and school commitments. They often do not have sufficient time to prepare for their high-stakes examinations or even take a good rest after school because of the weekly unpaid community service. Consequently, students could not cope with schoolwork with great aplomb, nor could they take all of their obligations in stride. Nevertheless, this does not necessarily imply that students should shy away from volunteer work.
In fact, there are two benefits accruing from engaging in voluntary jobs. The immediate one is that participants can cultivate a sense of empathy. For example, students who were born with a silver spoon might show lesser compassion for the poor. After they are being forced to do volunteer work by their school, they would have a chance to understand how difficult real life is.
In addition, students do this unpaid community service can relieve study-related stress. Many scientific studies have shown that as time goes on, there are many students facing the depressive disorder because of the pressure from school. In order to solve it, the scientists suggest that the best option for students is to do volunteer work. According to data, after students do their voluntary work, their dopamine levels will have significant increased, which can prevent depressive disorder.
In conclusion, the idea of doing unpaid community service is completely viable. Although it might make students busier, they can acquire empathy and release stress. Hence, high school students should seize the chance to make contributions to society.
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 222, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'juggling'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'challenge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: juggling
...igh school students find it challenging to juggle voluntary work and school commitments. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, hence, if, nevertheless, so, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1772.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 323.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.48606811146 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85037950538 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59133126935 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 531.9 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.7856609053 49.4020404114 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.2631578947 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.84210526316 7.06120827912 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18691897853 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0649552408817 0.084324248473 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0589560618353 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115198399423 0.151304729494 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0135903626166 0.056905535591 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.27 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 222, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'juggling'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'challenge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: juggling
...igh school students find it challenging to juggle voluntary work and school commitments. ...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, hence, if, nevertheless, so, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1772.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 323.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.48606811146 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85037950538 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59133126935 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 531.9 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.7856609053 49.4020404114 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.2631578947 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.84210526316 7.06120827912 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18691897853 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0649552408817 0.084324248473 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0589560618353 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115198399423 0.151304729494 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0135903626166 0.056905535591 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.27 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.