Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes ( for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children)
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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It is commonly argued that volunteering should be an obligatory part of high school curriculum. Although it has its own benefits to students to a certain extent, I am of the opinion that it should be optional which students can do something of their own choice.
On the one hand, there are several reasons why the young people are encouraged to do more community service. The main benefit is that youngsters can gain their sense of personal responsibility towards their communities. Doing activities such as taking care of elderly people in nursing home and collecting food and clothes for people who meet with difficulties will teach the youth moral values with a strong sense of self and obtain more awareness about their society and from these they will make efforts to improve the life for all citizens. Furthermore, students also would get the experience and much easier to get the job than those who did not do community activities. For example, when they have been teaching for poor students free of charge for a while, they will have a nice curriculum vitae with a little experience in teaching to apply for a job and they also can get the higher salary than those who does not have skills as well.
On the other hand, high school students have to face to many assignments and presentations with a limited period of time, so they do not have much free time to do other activities. As a result, they will get stressed if community services are mandatory of their school curricula, and they cannot get high score in the examinations because of various distractions from them. Additionally, because the youth has never attended doing different activities whether they are into or not and they do not have any skills related to these activities such as communication skills, public speaking skills and task and time management skills, they cannot fulfill exactly all the requirements then gradually feel uninterested and spread effect. Therefore, it is extremely difficult for them to pleasure for volunteering in the near future.
In conclusion, there are more persuasive reasons that if students pay much attention to community service, they will ignore their homework and hard to pass the exam with flying colors and with other visible pressures, they are not willing to do it anymore. hence, students should do free public service voluntarily instead of being included in high school curricula.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, hence, if, so, then, therefore, well, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2012.0 1615.20841683 125% => OK
No of words: 402.0 315.596192385 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00497512438 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72980681576 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514925373134 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 625.5 506.74238477 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.2975951904 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 86.7600922629 49.4020404114 176% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.769230769 106.682146367 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.9230769231 20.7667163134 149% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0769230769 7.06120827912 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193161875745 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0820471889151 0.084324248473 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0486498211795 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127239542064 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.022891134282 0.056905535591 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.6 13.0946893788 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 50.2224549098 82% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.1190380762 138% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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