Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmers (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children).
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is believed that unpaid community activities should be put in the school curriculum as a mandatory part. While I accept that these outdoor activities are advantageous to high school students to some extent, I am of the opinion that the learners should not be forced to do social work.
On the one hand, joining community service brings high school learners some obvious advantages. First, students who do community work such as working for a charitable organization or teaching younger children may acquire plenty of interpersonal skills namely communication and teamwork skills. The reason is that when they work, they need to cooperate closely with other team members to complete their assigned tasks, or it is necessary for them to learn how to talk to the elderly and younger children in a proper way. Second, the learners given an opportunity to be part of a social program are likely to create a first impression on work recruiters or even universities. For instance, there are thousands of applications from straight-A students to famous universities like Oxford University, yet only a limited percentage of applicants are selected thanks to doing community work on a voluntary basis.
On the other hand, I would argue that schools should not force high school students to participate in those social activities as a part of schooling. The first problem is that these people spend much time not only studying at school but also doing homework, which means that if they do such required extracurricular activities, they might not have enough time to fulfill their academic commitments. This causes the students to suffer from stress having a negative impact on their physical and emotional health. Furthermore, that these learners spend time taking part in community programs means lessening an amount of spare time for doing sports and loved ones, which may assist them in generating a great deal of energy so that they continue studying the following day.
In conclusion, although there are some real benefits of engaging in community programs for high school learners, I still believe that it is not obligatory for them to do these social activities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a proper way" with adverb for "proper"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, may, second, so, still, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1813.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 353.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13597733711 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83293201045 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546742209632 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 558.0 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.9830220224 49.4020404114 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.083333333 106.682146367 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.4166666667 20.7667163134 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0833333333 7.06120827912 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.336291706559 0.244688304435 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129028183613 0.084324248473 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0703261634898 0.0667982634062 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.22248188357 0.151304729494 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0553910403835 0.056905535591 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 13.0946893788 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 50.2224549098 84% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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