Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports for younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There is one viewpoint indicating that high schools’ curricula must require students to get involved in activities in the community services without being paid. However, I consider this belief to be against my opinion and somewhat implausible. It is not students’ responsibility and participating in these activities will, to some extent, afflict their performance at school.
The primary reason for not compelling students to join in community services lies in the fact that tackling these social issues must be the government’s duty, not students. I firmly believe that students’ main concentration must be on study affairs and activities that facilitate their self-development such as sports or arts. While it is undeniable that we should encourage them to care more about their surrounding environment, it is not students’ who must be in charge of social problems around them, but instead, they must take responsibility for their academic achievements.
Additionally, this type of activity, when compulsory, will play as a distraction from students’ academic performance. Rather than giving studying the highest priority, students would switch their attention to organizing and managing those community services as effectively as possible. By doing so, it is apparent that they will spend less of their time studying. Even if they manage to equally split their time, students will be under enormous pressure and this will negatively affect their health, both physically and mentally.
All things considered, what students need to focus on are their academic stuff and the way leading to self-development so that they could be the best version of themselves. Everything related to community services must be of the authorities’ concern.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, while, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1492.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 267.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.58801498127 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.22202752557 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.621722846442 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 448.2 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.7279152255 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.333333333 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.25 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 7.06120827912 42% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144691597231 0.244688304435 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.059239756156 0.084324248473 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0393776984087 0.0667982634062 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0932229060199 0.151304729494 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0392878333337 0.056905535591 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.44 12.4159519038 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, while, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1492.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 267.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.58801498127 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.22202752557 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.621722846442 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 448.2 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.7279152255 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.333333333 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.25 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 7.06120827912 42% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144691597231 0.244688304435 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.059239756156 0.084324248473 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0393776984087 0.0667982634062 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0932229060199 0.151304729494 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0392878333337 0.056905535591 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.44 12.4159519038 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.