Some people claim that museums and art galleries will not be needed today because everyone can see historical objects or art works by computer. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
In this day and age, many people argue that works of art or historical remnants can be observed online; therefore, the necessity of traditional museums and art galleries is denied. This can be a sound argument but to me personally, I disagree with this opinion since museums or galleries are still of great importance in the modern world and justifications are as follows.
There is a wide array of reasons that account for the magnitude of museums but the most prime one is that humans are given the opportunity to contemplate great art works. In contrast to hectic schedule at work or at school, it is likely that the exclusively designed space and ambience in museums or galleries may act as a hub for entertainment and it will help people feel relaxed. Additionally, having real experience of seeing history-related objects or famous artworks will generate inspiration or new sources of ideas for those who are not only in the field of art or history but also for people in other professions.
The second reason is that museums and galleries help us develop a sense of respect towards history and art of our own country or other countries in the world. Admiring real historical objects or artworks can help people learn more about their own country’s history and aesthetic field , thus making them cherish part of their national identity. Furthermore, the sophistication of art or the intensity of war will be shown, which enable people to experience the authenticity that cannot be seen on the Internet. The most conspicuous case-in-point is when one can observe the real “Mona Lisa” at the museum, it may be a valuable cultural experience that hardly anything can compare.
In summary, although some people may claim that museums or art galleries are not necessary in the modern world, I am still in favor of the opinion that they still play a critical significance in our life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, may, second, so, still, then, therefore, thus, as for, in contrast, in summary, in contrast to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 10.4138276553 211% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1579.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 320.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.934375 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88378297196 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53125 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 496.8 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.2975951904 158% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 23.2226182848 49.4020404114 47% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 157.9 106.682146367 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.0 20.7667163134 154% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.2 7.06120827912 173% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.370375276449 0.244688304435 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.14232441931 0.084324248473 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0731168224712 0.0667982634062 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.226308423271 0.151304729494 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0819645720226 0.056905535591 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 13.0946893788 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.0 50.2224549098 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.91 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.1190380762 146% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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