Some people claim that public museums and art galleries will be no longer necessary because people can see historical objects and works of art by using a computer. Do you agree or disagree?
It is agrued that public museums and art galleries will be no longer importance since historic objects and works of art can be saw by using a modern technology. From my point of view, i mostly disagree with this notion because of its drawbacks for the population life. The following essay will analyse this statement in detail.
First of all, in the international world and with the appearence of new innovation that individuals are just concentrate on their occupation and they has forgot other historical value, so traditional public local such as museums and art galleries is hugely significant for the society. Not only will the adult have more time for their adolesence which increase their abilities and social experience, but also the creative and imagination skills of teenagers will be advances graduately by this phenomenon. Furthermore, numerous disease can be heal by reality pictures or classical music, improving the people mentality life. To illustrate, there was a vurvey by Jenny Parker, the famous scientist and professor which was about the success of postgraduate who enjoy with art value. The statistic showed that nearly everyone has got a plenty of achievement in their career.
However, we can not negate the weakness of this problem for the individual life. The socioeconomic can be wided where only wealthy people have opportunity to appoarch with the acadamic knowledge or valuable information. Moreover, many government take advantage from this investment for their own revenue, various harmful influence will be led by this action.
To conclude, by my agrument from the essay that i totally disagree with this statement since public museums and art galleries have positive aspect for the society. The government need to have clear plan to improve their citizens for the nation development.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...will analyse this statement in detail. First of all, in the international world...
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Message: Use simply 'innovation'.
Suggestion: innovation
...tional world and with the appearence of new innovation that individuals are just concentrate o...
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Line 2, column 153, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...oncentrate on their occupation and they has forgot other historical value, so tradi...
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Line 2, column 157, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'forgotten'.
Suggestion: forgotten
...ntrate on their occupation and they has forgot other historical value, so traditional ...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...plenty of achievement in their career. However, we can not negate the weakness ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... influence will be led by this action. To conclude, by my agrument from the ess...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, as for, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.3376753507 216% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1531.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 291.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26116838488 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83034702863 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.601374570447 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 488.7 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.904596419 49.4020404114 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.769230769 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3846153846 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.69230769231 7.06120827912 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26712109768 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0912371220426 0.084324248473 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115427280535 0.0667982634062 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174799245718 0.151304729494 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10439145394 0.056905535591 183% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.72 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...will analyse this statement in detail. First of all, in the international world...
^^
Line 2, column 71, Rule ID: NEW_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'innovation'.
Suggestion: innovation
...tional world and with the appearence of new innovation that individuals are just concentrate o...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 153, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...oncentrate on their occupation and they has forgot other historical value, so tradi...
^^^
Line 2, column 157, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'forgotten'.
Suggestion: forgotten
...ntrate on their occupation and they has forgot other historical value, so traditional ...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...plenty of achievement in their career. However, we can not negate the weakness ...
^^
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... influence will be led by this action. To conclude, by my agrument from the ess...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, as for, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.3376753507 216% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1531.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 291.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26116838488 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83034702863 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.601374570447 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 488.7 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.904596419 49.4020404114 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.769230769 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3846153846 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.69230769231 7.06120827912 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26712109768 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0912371220426 0.084324248473 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115427280535 0.0667982634062 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174799245718 0.151304729494 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10439145394 0.056905535591 183% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.72 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.