Some people claim that public museums and art galleries will be no longer necessary because people can see historical objects and works of art by using a computer. Do you agree or disagree?
It is sometimes argued that historical and artistic displays will disappear one day since people are able to find them on the Internet. I completely disagree with this point of view.
There are several reasons why it is necessary to preserve museums and art galleries. Firstly, they are valuable assets to the tourism industry, which is one of the main financial source of the country. This means tourist can come and explore cultural and historical values in person instead of checking images through a boring screen. As a result, they would have a wealth of knowledge about a country's past and national identity via tangible evidence. For example, when I went to Dat Lat - a southern city of Vietnam with my mother, we were so amazed by the King's life about 70 years ago. We can enjoy the atmosphere there and imagine about his family's life before through all the real objects in the museum like how they cook, they work and where they hold the meeting and so on.
Moreover, people will have more chances to initiate conversations with those who have the same interests and exchange their opinions on pieces of artwork. By doing such things, they can enhance genuine social interactions, which they cannot gain if they just see and click a mouse on the Internest. Then their relationships can be strengthened and it would be paving the way for greater bonds in their lives. For instance, when I go to the art galleries to enjoy some masterpieces there, I met some friends and we had a conversation about the art there, exchange our opinion about the works what we think of it and how we feel. From that, we also understand more about each other and I also got some good friends.
In conclusion, it is crucial to preserve museums and art galleries because it makes a great contribution to a tourism industry of the country and enhance the public's awareness of historical things as well as some pieces of arts.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 159, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'publics'' or 'public's'?
Suggestion: publics'; public's
...industry of the country and enhance the publics awareness of historical things as well ...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, moreover, so, then, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1580.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 335.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71641791045 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57580645848 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588059701493 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.9101633777 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.857142857 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9285714286 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.71428571429 7.06120827912 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230990591199 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0675249100148 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0556792027876 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137962120978 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.039364257953 0.056905535591 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.4159519038 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 159, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'publics'' or 'public's'?
Suggestion: publics'; public's
...industry of the country and enhance the publics awareness of historical things as well ...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, moreover, so, then, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1580.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 335.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71641791045 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57580645848 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588059701493 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.9101633777 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.857142857 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9285714286 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.71428571429 7.06120827912 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230990591199 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0675249100148 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0556792027876 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137962120978 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.039364257953 0.056905535591 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.4159519038 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.