Some people do not go directly to college but travel or work for a short time Do you think it has more advantages or disadvantages

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Some people do not go directly to college but travel or work for a short time. Do you think it has more advantages or disadvantages?

There is a growing tendency among students to have a gap-year for travel or work prior to their tertiary education. Although the benefits are foreseeable, I would argue that the drawbacks are greater.

On the one hand, taking a short period of time away from school is advantageous to school leavers. Firstly, this is considered as a short break to unwind after years of schooling. Many schoolboys and schoolgirls have to suffer from the pressure of achievements which they are supposed to make. Secondly, spending a gap-year for travelling or working provides the young people with hands-on experience that is useful for their future jobs. What is more, they can make some money to support their lives; some can save for their higher education.

On the other hand, the disadvantages from this trend are many. Perhaps the most significant impact is that students struggle to come back to study as a feeling of falling behind their classmates. According to some researches, many of them, who have registered to tertiary education, have failed in their exams or dropped out of school after a gap-year. Additionally, students are lured to satisfy with the incomes they make from their temporary jobs. This leads them to a sense of distraction from study as they believe they can earn their livings.

To sum up, having a certain amount of time to work or travel between school years brings both pros and cons. However, from my perspective, its risks have been outweighed by the potential benefits.

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Average: 5.4 (4 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, to sum up, what is more, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1255.0 1615.20841683 78% => OK
No of words: 250.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97635364384 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69716592 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.58 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 375.3 506.74238477 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.5495126515 49.4020404114 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 89.6428571429 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8571428571 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.64285714286 7.06120827912 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13952631964 0.244688304435 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0481827526183 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0514789561157 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0904405359883 0.151304729494 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0589556358822 0.056905535591 104% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.0946893788 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.54 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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