Some people feel that young people should follow the traditions of their society. Others, however, believe that young people should be free to behave as individuals. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Hitherto, globalization has led to disparities of showing personal characteristic credo, and the question of whether following traditional belief brings youngsters benefits or not has been raising public attention. While many people lament that the new generation should not specialize their daily life, I oppose this view by giving some rational evidence.
It is conspicuous that adults are always significantly affected by traditional customs, so that they want to pass down these credo to their children. We can not deny that some of old belief is good for us, however, they are old-fashioned in this modern era and that will deter the world to develop. If the new generation are reluctantly accepting these old-fashioned views, they can not be an open-minded people, deterring them from contacting with pioneered thinking.
On the other hand, in the democracy, resident are allowed to be unique, so that children can easily specialize from the crowed. Furthermore, employers always pay attention to people who have different thinking among a group of employees, so that youngsters will have more opportunities due to their unique characteristics. On top of that, being unique also helps young people to have a variety of perspective, and they can give the most reasonable solution for a problem. A vivid example was Samsung in 2020, when the prevailing phone market was saturated and people then fed up with normal phone’ design, Samsung made a revolution of design, creating a foldable phone that attracted tons of consumers, therefore, this company reached the pinnacle of turnover of the year and successfully heighten their reputation.
In conclusion, traditional methods are not bad, but this modern era need special things that can make the revolution to the world, so it is extremely necessary to being unique in the society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 94, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
...wing personal characteristic credo, and the question of whether following traditional belief brings you...
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Line 2, column 120, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this credo' or 'these credos'?
Suggestion: this credo; these credos
...customs, so that they want to pass down these credo to their children. We can not deny that...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, so, then, therefore, while, in conclusion, on the other hand, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1551.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 293.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29351535836 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01601838136 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.61433447099 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 479.7 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.0752861 49.4020404114 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 155.1 106.682146367 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.3 20.7667163134 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.3 7.06120827912 160% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19435101391 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0734943362701 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0594545173285 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10502142787 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.058082108601 0.056905535591 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 13.0946893788 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 50.2224549098 84% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.99 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.71 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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