Some people say free time activities for children should be organized (by parents). Others say that children should be free to choose what they do in their free time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Hitherto, globalization has led to some disparities in the credo of kids’ management, and the question of whether parents should control the leisure time of their children or not has been raising public attention. While many people lament that parents should raise awareness to what their kids doing, I am gravitated toward the opposite view by giving some rational evidence.
It is conspicuous that ready-made routes can increase the performance of kids in studying due to the rational break period, or it can make children avoid being addicted to games or cartoons. Putting aside these benefits, there is a huge drawback to controlling kids too much, and flexibility is one of them. If children always follow a ready-made route, it means they could be at risk of being passive, which could affect the flexibility of their work in the future. What’s more, the compulsory of their parents deters kids from interacting with their friends, shortening their relationships and isolating them from the outside world. A vivid example is that somewhere in Vietnam, due to the credo that adults are always right and the over-control of parents, kids have become autistic.
On the other hand, letting kids to do what they like in leisure time is believed to be rational in some places. Children are very vulnerable, so the way parents teach them affects their characteristics a lot. Freedom can give kids relaxation, and it can also shield them from parents’ tutelage, which limits kids independence. In some nations, children are free in their leisure time, so they can acquire a wealth of new knowledge, which is very helpful in their career. Although many people lament that their kids can acquire bad things from the internet, this is also a chance for kids to learn. An early-open mind can help children to understand fully the world.
In conclusion, both managing credo have their own benefits, but children should be allowed to follow their interest. Parent should consider to the way they teach their kids to not let to the bad consequence.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 91, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
...s in the credo of kids’ management, and the question of whether parents should control the leisure time...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, while, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1709.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 340.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02647058824 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71541001639 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532352941176 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 513.0 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.2190179535 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.933333333 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6666666667 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.86666666667 7.06120827912 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29733422238 0.244688304435 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107500246555 0.084324248473 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0728389970891 0.0667982634062 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199801715745 0.151304729494 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0466188367467 0.056905535591 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 91, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
...s in the credo of kids’ management, and the question of whether parents should control the leisure time...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, while, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1709.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 340.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02647058824 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71541001639 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532352941176 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 513.0 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.2190179535 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.933333333 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6666666667 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.86666666667 7.06120827912 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29733422238 0.244688304435 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107500246555 0.084324248473 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0728389970891 0.0667982634062 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199801715745 0.151304729494 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0466188367467 0.056905535591 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.