Some people regard work as the most important thing in life and have little interest in anything else. Other people are most enthusiastic about their hobbies and leisure interest than their jobs. Discuss both of the attitudes and give your opinion.
Nowdays, many people believe that employment is one of the most essential to support all activities and decided to focus on their jobs and don't care about anything, while others oppose this because some hobies and personal life very helpful to invent their own happiness rather than working everyday. I will discuss both viewpoints and convey the opinion.
Undoubtedly that working is crucial part in social life because without employment someone can not acquire money and this condition giving negative impact in economic household. On the other hand, people assume that value of happiness from money because income will make life of someone easily. While, sometimes ovefwork made someone can not focus and concentrate with what happen around them and as a result what they do not producing good results. As illustration, in Indonesia employee have obligation to working at least 40 hours a week, ultimately, consequently, their work disorganized and can not be finished because their body was tired. Thus, working in a long will make mind of someone can not thinking as well.
In contrast, few of people prefer to spare many time to do some exercise whiches it is can very useful to utilize their time. In other hand, excessive stress makes a person lose a lot of time to do positive effect until they decided to filling the time through their hobbies. However, someone someone who spends a lot of time with hobbies, usually derived from rich family, or owner of some business and have flexible time to working. For instance, Hafiz Mohammad is one of my inspiration, he has big business and success to expand it in several country in the world and one of it is Indonesia, he has office to his employee but he spend his time with his daughter and wife at home, but his money always flows. Work is not always in the office, sometimes we must use our brain to creating some strategy to make money without exhausting yourself and just do your time more productive by doing activities it can recovery your health.
To conclude, money will never be separated from human life, but sometimes someone should be relax with another activities to make sure their body stay strong. In my opinion, both of this thing is important to combine.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 140, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... and decided to focus on their jobs and dont care about anything, while others oppos...
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Line 1, column 292, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...their own happiness rather than working everyday. I will discuss both viewpoints and con...
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Line 2, column 704, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'think'
Suggestion: think
... long will make mind of someone can not thinking as well. In contrast, few of people pr...
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Line 3, column 44, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun time seems to be countable; consider using: 'many times'.
Suggestion: many times
...contrast, few of people prefer to spare many time to do some exercise whiches it is can v...
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Line 3, column 88, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'canned'.
Suggestion: canned
... time to do some exercise whiches it is can very useful to utilize their time. In o...
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Line 3, column 285, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: someone
...he time through their hobbies. However, someone someone who spends a lot of time with hobbies, ...
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Line 3, column 632, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'spends'.
Suggestion: spends
...a, he has office to his employee but he spend his time with his daughter and wife at ...
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Line 4, column 93, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'relaxed'?
Suggestion: relaxed
...n life, but sometimes someone should be relax with another activities to make sure th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, however, if, so, thus, well, while, at least, for instance, in contrast, as a result, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1853.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 381.0 315.596192385 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86351706037 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49049142062 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553805774278 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 603.9 506.74238477 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.7519380278 49.4020404114 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.357142857 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2142857143 20.7667163134 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.78571428571 7.06120827912 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212212419556 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0790092682626 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0623553628029 0.0667982634062 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147204159055 0.151304729494 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0768965556583 0.056905535591 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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