Some people say that all young people should have a full-time education until they are 18 years old. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
An educational issue of modern societies is whether or not students should be required to stay in school until eighteen, with conflicting views on which option is the better one. One opinion states that academic institutions should continue to encourage their students to earn a graduation diploma before leaving school.
Advocates of this believe that gaining fundamental knowledge and demonstrating it on a certified degree means being able to meet recruiting requirements of the ever-increasingly competitive job market. If an applicant holds a diploma, he may land a steady job with a decent salary, rather than making a living by doing labor-intensive manual work. Besides, having full-time education will ward off any social factors which might negatively affect the psychological health of the young person and eventually break study concentration.
However, there are pitfalls that have not been considered by this viewpoint. Tuition fees can be a financial burden, and it can trigger a chain reaction among young people coming from a poor background. Those students might find it tempting to drop-out and seek a part-time job to support their families. The expensive cost of university education and taking out a large amount of loan may further discourage students from continuing to study.
From a personal perspective, governments had better make high school graduation at 18 optional. There should also be financial-aid options for those are in need, for example, by hiring pupils to work on campus. For those who excel at learning, finishing school earlier than 18 should be allowed.
In my opinion, focusing on educators to enforce study is too narrow of an approach and would not have the desired results. The more effective way would be to look at other aspects of life apart from education.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 45, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...ducational issue of modern societies is whether or not students should be required to stay in ...
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Line 5, column 19, Rule ID: BELIEVE_BELIEF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'belief' (noun) instead of believe (verb)?
Suggestion: belief
... leaving school. Advocates of this believe that gaining fundamental knowledge and ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, however, if, look, may, so, apart from, for example, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1540.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 289.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32871972318 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98760825602 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.667820069204 0.561755894193 119% => OK
syllable_count: 466.2 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.8898107029 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.0 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6428571429 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.78571428571 7.06120827912 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169090502787 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.051458276574 0.084324248473 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0317062815827 0.0667982634062 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0820519711042 0.151304729494 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0223364901873 0.056905535591 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.55 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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