Some people say that all young people should have full time education until they are 18 years old To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion

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Some people say that all young people should have full-time education until they are 18 years old. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

It is true that education for youngsters is a controversial issue in many countries. The debate focuses on the necessity of offering full time teaching for students before reaching the age of majority. While I accept some benefits this trend offers, I do not consider that students should study full-time.

On the one hand, there are a variety of reasons why children who are less than 18 years old should study full-time at school. Firstly, full-time education allows young people broaden their own knowledge about different fields through a wide range of subjects such as math, literature or history. As a result, basic knowledge will help a group of student fulfills essential skills which serve in the future and give them countless opportunities to solve the complex problems in daily life. Secondly, teenagers have more tendency to develop violent behavior because they witness frequently violent act through the internet or games. Therefore, young children will more likely to turn into crimes, causing the damaging effect on the society so studying full-time may reduce their time wasted on these doings and also lessen the burden for the society.

On the other hand, I disagree that teenagers should be required to study full-time. One reason is that the incredible pressure of studying at school accounts for a great deal of how teenagers's spend their time so they easily suffer from stress and depression. For example, children in many developed countries like Korean or Japan become mentally disordered or have the nervous breakdown because they have to complete a large number of assignments. Another important factor is that adolescents should be encouraged to watch some kinds of TV shows which not only relax under pressure on homework but also develop their practical skills. This can bring positive impact on studying at school.

In conclusion, it seems to me that young learners should balance their timetable by taking part in outdoor activities rather than studying day by day.

Votes
Average: 7.4 (37 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 134, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
...te focuses on the necessity of offering full time teaching for students before reaching t...
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Line 5, column 419, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...breakdown because they have to complete a large number of assignments. Another important factor i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, it is true, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1688.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 324.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20987654321 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61504096762 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 176.041082164 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.635802469136 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 513.0 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.2904615658 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.571428571 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1428571429 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0714285714 7.06120827912 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237211192174 0.244688304435 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0784902877077 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0548199705226 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129738693659 0.151304729494 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0546054638606 0.056905535591 96% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.0946893788 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.31 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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