Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required
These days, it become a controversial topic that the best way to progress public health is by increasing the amount of sports facilities. However, some of the society believed that this would have a little effect in public health and that other measures are required. There are both advantages and disadvantages for increasing the number of sport facilities recently. In this essay, I completely disagree that improving public health bu progressing sports facilities will gives more merits rather than the drawbacks for several cases.
In the one hand initially, educating the society about health warning is outweigh rather than increasing the number of sport facilities. Firstly, the government should educates them about health awareness which make them realize that healthy is important to keep. From that, they will ameliorating their lifestyle pattern so the sport facilities could utilize maximally. Secondly, it will spent a high amount of expense if the society can’t utilize it well. It is due to expensiveness of sport stuffs which very unfortunate if the society don’t understand about health awareness. For example, when the lifestyle pattern of the society is bad such as they don’t even have active lifestyle and eat junk food frequently which indicating they don’t understand about health care. As the result, it is such a wasteful for expanding the sport facilities because the society don’t even use it maximally due to unawareness. So it is important to make sure the health awareness of the society initially before make the decision.
Differs with the demerits above, possibly some of the society possessed health on themselves and will raise awareness about their health after the government increased the sport facilities. It can be believed that a part of people already have an active lifestyle and they need a better facilities to improve their health. For instance, they are too bored for having the exercises at the gum whose need some fresh air such as jogging in the park or riverside. It means that the government have to reconstruction the parks and riversides such as adding up fitness or sport tools. Therefore, the sport lovers will get the advantages for expanding the sport facilities. Looking at the comparison, there is no doubt that increasing number of sport facilities is not effective before most of the society realize about their health care.
In conclusion, from right here I stand that I don’t believed that improving the number of sport facilities is the best way for increasing public health. In my opinion, it gives more drawbacks rather than the benefits.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, no doubt, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2223.0 1615.20841683 138% => OK
No of words: 423.0 315.596192385 134% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25531914894 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80585876664 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.451536643026 0.561755894193 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 694.8 506.74238477 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.6431270841 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.15 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.15 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4 7.06120827912 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.67935871743 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.335516951963 0.244688304435 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118654974996 0.084324248473 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113742809977 0.0667982634062 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.255502318106 0.151304729494 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.131566087379 0.056905535591 231% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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