Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
No one can cast a shadow of doubt on the fact that the enough amount of physical exercises plays a vital role on individuals and public health status. In this regard, a group of people have voiced that adding more sports facilities is the best approach in public health improvement. However, others have claimed that there are more effective ways to do so. In my point of view, although the sufficient number of sports centers might have positive benefits for society, I think the other methods should be considered.
On the one hand, it is undeniable that appropriate physical activities can help to have both of mental and physical health. Admittedly, there is an indispensable that a wide range of sports centers to be provided to encourage people to exercise which they are interested in. With increasing number of people who do regularly exercises, it is expected that the rate of several diseases which are caused by unhealthy lifestyles such as diabetes, obesity and heart attack would be reduced. In spite of positive effects that would be offered by large number of sport facilities, the interest of people for attending in these centers depends on their self-motivation. if they are reluctant to add healthy activities to their daily routine, these kind of investments would be useless.
On the other hand, another group of people believe that there are considerable alternative ways to improve the healthiness of community. for example, if nutrition standards are redesigned properly, and governments support manufacturing of healthy foods by deducing taxes, people would be encouraged to reduce their bad habits gradually. Now days, these habits that incline to intake harmful and nutrition-worthless foods uncontrollably are the most contribution in coming up with different illnesses.
In conclusion, although there are possible positive effects of increasing the number of sports club, these effects be negligible comparing with other alternatives. Therefore, I strongly believe that we could prioritize more effective and more efficient solutions to change and improve food style of people .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, therefore, for example, i think, in conclusion, kind of, such as, in spite of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1795.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 333.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.39039039039 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02012118756 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552552552553 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 567.0 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.5532625623 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.214285714 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7857142857 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.42857142857 7.06120827912 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.30025520469 0.244688304435 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101093478448 0.084324248473 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0606821880637 0.0667982634062 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172899579983 0.151304729494 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0738523900854 0.056905535591 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.28 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.04 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.