Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities Others say that this would have little effect on public health and the other measures are required Discuss both views and give your opinion

Essay topics:

Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, say that this would have little effect on public health and the other measures are required. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Because of human’s tendency which they have wanted to live longer and also be more healthier, the practical ways for heightening the public health have been controversial discussion among them. While some individuals think the most useful method for this issue is to expanding sport facilities, others believe this is not the only main one and other measures should be taken. Both of these groups’ ideas as well as the writer’s opinion which is implementing more amenities than just sport ones will be explained later.

On the one side of this issue, some significant points of regarding training as the only way for this issue should not be overlooked. Allocating more fields in societies to be exercising ones has been for the main aspect of being in a good physical condition which has had an inseparable relation to exercising. In other words, being active and doing some interested sports have propelled people not only to be healthier but also to improve their mind abilities. Moreover, there has been a considerable benefits for people who have been working out such as fewer health problems, less chances of getting cancer than people who have not been active. Consequently, if more people joined to exercise a great deal of their time, they would be fewer horrible health conditions in citizens.

On the other hand, other individuals although have considered exercising as the one valuable way for being in shape, they believe it has not always been a decisive way. Their thoughts have been based on some examples during these years of human’s lifespan, which has indicated them that some professional sportspeople who have got serious disease even though they have been working out and living healthy. In addition, one major problem in one society could not be solved just by attempting its citizens. Therefore, another measures in a bigger scale should be taken by governments such as increasing people’s knowledge, revising their wrong features like declining air pollution. These actions could be extremely effective for reducing possibilities of having serious illnesses.

In conclusion, in spite of all the benefits of working out which I myself have been aware of as like most of the people, I have not considered it as the only practical action for this issue. Applying more practical arrangements such as gaining more about all kinds of disease or being informed of the latest information about them will lead the international community to interface fewer health difficulties.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 79, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'healthier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: healthier
... have wanted to live longer and also be more healthier, the practical ways for heightening the...
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Line 1, column 405, Rule ID: BOTH_AS_WELL_AS[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
...d be taken. Both of these groups’ ideas as well as the writer’s opinion which is implement...
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Line 3, column 504, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'benefit'?
Suggestion: benefit
...Moreover, there has been a considerable benefits for people who have been working out su...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 581, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun chances is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...king out such as fewer health problems, less chances of getting cancer than people w...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, look, moreover, regarding, so, therefore, well, while, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as well as, in other words, in spite of, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 13.1623246493 198% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2110.0 1615.20841683 131% => OK
No of words: 407.0 315.596192385 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18427518428 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77840810213 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525798525799 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 655.2 506.74238477 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 38.2864060587 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.666666667 106.682146367 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1333333333 20.7667163134 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.9333333333 7.06120827912 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205061013382 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0782140900855 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0495683282116 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138212867343 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0574062207603 0.056905535591 101% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.0946893788 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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