Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience
Write at least 250 words
The level of citizens’ health is a significantly crucial issue either for the government and the individual, and some approve that the most important method to make people healthier is through supplying more exercise equipment, however, the others believe that there are some ways which may be more useful. In my opinion, the growth of the number of sports facilities may be not so helpful for sure.
To begin with, the government may encourage persons to do sports often and supply enough resouces for them by constructing more gyms, tennis courts and so on. This will be a brilliant choice in terms of making communities realize the importance of exercising regularly. Additionally, a man can reduce the level of stress and anxiouty by running,jogging,playing basketball after the daily working, which will result in the decrease of the possibilities of getting fat and other relating diseases like diabetes.
On the other hand, the status of the whole society’s health is not simply controlled by the numbers of exercising equipment,but can be affected by other factors. Firstly,the government ought to reduce the required working time in order to make sure people are willing to do exercise. A woman will not prefer to go to the swimming pool as she has been working all the day which makes her feel so tired and sleepy,then she will just lie down instead. Secondly, the overall level of a country’s healthcare system plays a vital role in protecting people suffering from certain serious diseases like cancer. People have more chances to prevent the sickness through videos and radio programs when the government supply the media department with reasonable financial support. Thirdly, medical colleges are supposed to encourage more students and teachers to spend time in researching valuable methods to cure and prevent some popular sickness like the flu caused by bacteria.
From the view of my point, the increment of exercising tools and places may be helpful to the improvement of the statement of the society, however, this can be extremely limited in solving the problem. Therefore, there are a certain of other ways for officials to choose,like reducing the working time, increasing the days of vacations,etc. At the same time, it can be more useful if the government invest enough money in the education and algermation of the medical field, which will make the healthcare system more comprehensible and affordable for most persons to get cured after becoming sick.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: , jogging
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Suggestion: , but
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Suggestion: , the
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Suggestion: , then
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 24.0651302605 46% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 41.998997996 148% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2091.0 1615.20841683 129% => OK
No of words: 404.0 315.596192385 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17574257426 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96196335047 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 176.041082164 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539603960396 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 648.0 506.74238477 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 10.0 2.52805611222 396% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.3681273951 49.4020404114 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.357142857 106.682146367 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8571428571 20.7667163134 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0714285714 7.06120827912 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130964019201 0.244688304435 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0490879836517 0.084324248473 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0437528620503 0.0667982634062 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0872291597741 0.151304729494 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0358003306388 0.056905535591 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 13.0946893788 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.36 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 78.4519038076 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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