Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
It is believed that encouraging the construction of various sports amenities is the predominant method to enhancing public health. While others say that it is more effective to require other measures than just relying on sports facilities. In this answer, I will discuss the rationales behind these two views before showing that why I favor the latter.
On the one hand, people’s health has been abundantly enhanced by the development of sports amenities. To begin with, fitness levels are increasing because more and more people participate in daily exercises and doing physical activities. Consequently, rising in fitness centers, gym clubs gives individuals who love sports more opportunities to improve their health. For example, both children and adults in my neighborhood attend yoga classes, basketball courts, etc in order to keep fit and stay healthy.
However, I side with those who say that the aforementioned approach would bring a minimum impact on public health. This is because increasing the number of sports facilities does not translate to attracting more participants bettering their health. In most cities these days, despite the ubiquity of places that residents can play sports for free, the majority of the population are solely inactive and health problems related to lack of exercise are on the rise. Furthermore, those who paid for an annual gym membership failed to go entirely after just one month because of their full workday. To meaningfully improve the health of the public, each individual should be educated about basic health awareness. A whole host of factors, including affordable access to healthcare, medical treatment, enforcement of food safety, learning about health and fitness, and so on. For instance, when a child comprehends more about the adverse effects of smoking, he might avoid negative habits in his adulthood. Moreover, public campaigns and health protection programs, thus, should be promoted so that people know how to protect their health efficiently.
In conclusion, whilst the investment in sports facilities become the most reliable way to boost public health, I suppose that there are various other methods to support residents’ health.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, furthermore, however, moreover, so, thus, while, for example, for instance, i suppose, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1864.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 343.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.43440233236 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85665194807 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.626822157434 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 562.5 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.7706447616 49.4020404114 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 116.5 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4375 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0625 7.06120827912 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.379827139586 0.244688304435 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115274547087 0.084324248473 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.078488525129 0.0667982634062 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232635276069 0.151304729494 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0698211512884 0.056905535591 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.7 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 78.4519038076 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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