Some people say that the best way to improve public health is to increase the number of sport facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measure are required.

Every few years, the World Health Organization (WHO) runs a survey to assess the level of life expectancy in various countries all around the globe. One of its key parameters is public health. This fact solely shows that communities’ health is of vital importance, due to its direct tie to productivity and public expenses. The more a country’s population becomes healthy, the more workforce efficiency and the less medical costs are expected. However, the major question is, whether it could be provided only by improving sports facilities or not. This important issue is a place of a dispute between the two groups. I intend to put this contentious subject into the debate in terms of two groups’ points of view.
There is no doubt both parties of discussion are unanimous on the importance of public health improvement; Nevertheless, they split on “How?”. A group of people believes that the advancement of sport areas and facilities like swimming pools, gyms, etc. is the only way to refine the citizens' health condition. Although the other group says it is a generally good idea but is not enough. Owing to there are so many other factors e.g. air quality, nourishment quality, lifestyle, and so on, which have the same amount of impact, in not more effective, for every member of society. Recently, I have read an article in which scientists had investigated what indicators have a remarkable impact on everyone’s health condition during its life span. Results had shown two dozen factors e.g. social life, amount of connection and exposure to the environment, and alcohol drinking habits among many others could influence your life quality. This scientific paper has given me the impression that if any government aims to have a healthy society, it should provide so many circumstances along with sports facilities and amenities.
Overall, having compared both points of view, obviously reveals that a good solution to boost any community’s wellbeing factors should comprise more than just building a bunch of structures. In my point of view, this attitude without considering other elements can do more harm than good, because should the health budget centralized in the sports sector, the other parts will suffer from neglect. As a result, adopting a comprehensive and integrated approach could be the master key and panacea for tackling this very area. There is more to this subject than meets the eye, and I only could scratch the surface in these few minutes.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 293, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'citizens'' or 'citizen's'?
Suggestion: citizens'; citizen's
...yms, etc. is the only way to refine the citizens health condition. Although the other gr...
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Line 3, column 346, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...ld the health budget centralized in the sports sector, the other parts will suffer fro...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, e.g., however, if, nevertheless, so, well, no doubt, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2102.0 1615.20841683 130% => OK
No of words: 407.0 315.596192385 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16461916462 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96161250564 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 176.041082164 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.609336609337 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 648.9 506.74238477 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.6381289733 49.4020404114 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.631578947 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4210526316 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.63157894737 7.06120827912 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216620810949 0.244688304435 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0659635436067 0.084324248473 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0463483494794 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140512966602 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0385786777843 0.056905535591 68% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 78.4519038076 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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