Some people say free time activities for children should be organized (by parents). Others say that children should be free to choose what they do in their free time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Hitherto, globalization has led to some disparities in the credo of kids’ management, and the question of whether parents should control the leisure time of their children or not has been raising public attention. While many people lament that parents should raise awareness to what their kids doing, I am gravitated toward the opposite view by giving some rational evidence.
It is conspicuous that ready-made routes can increase the performance of kids in studying due to the rational break period, or it can make children avoid being addicted to games or cartoons. Beside these benefits, there is a huge drawback of controlling kids too much, and flexibility is the one that can not be ignored . If children always follow a ready-made route, it means they could be at risk of being passive, which could affect the flexibility of their work in the future. What’s more, the compulsory of their parents deters kids from interacting with their friends, shortening their relationships and isolating them from the outside world
On the other hand, letting kids to do what they like in leisure time is believed to be rational in some places. On science stand point, kids in the concrete operational stage are willing to discover new things, so the freedom in teaching way not only adapt their interest but also give an relaxation, shielding them from parents’ tutelage, which limits kids independence. In some nations, children are free in their leisure time, so they can recognize different aspects of a problem and give the most reasonable conclusion. Although many people lament that their kids can acquire bad things from the internet, this is also a chance for kids to consolidate their base knowledge of the world.
To summarize, both managing credo have their own benefits, but instead of control children, parents may let kids to be a free-thinkers
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 91, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
...s in the credo of kids’ management, and the question of whether parents should control the leisure time...
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Line 2, column 319, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ility is the one that can not be ignored . If children always follow a ready-made ...
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Line 3, column 287, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...only adapt their interest but also give an relaxation, shielding them from parents...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, while, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1555.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 306.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08169934641 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74980696007 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581699346405 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 473.4 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.2975951904 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 49.3600040519 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 155.5 106.682146367 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.6 20.7667163134 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8 7.06120827912 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312958076499 0.244688304435 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132539864518 0.084324248473 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0711044256404 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202951527077 0.151304729494 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.032833577892 0.056905535591 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 13.0946893788 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 50.2224549098 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.78 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.1190380762 138% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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