Some people say that the government should control the amount of violent in films and on television in order to reduce violent crimes in society. To what extent to do you agree or disagree with this view?
The question of whether governments around the world should mitigate the risks arising due to violent crimes being shown on TV and other entertainment sources is debatable but I do believe that proper control and assessment of the violence shown in movies in necessary.
In order to make sure that appropriate films are categorized and distributed to specific crowds, a control board must be set up. this will reduce the proliferation of these videos to people who might get further affected by these shows. Furthermore, some graphic scenes must be prohibited to be broadcasted to the general public. For example, in Indonesia, the governing body has banned all sorts of audio-visual entertainment which visualise obscene of unwanted images to the public.
On the other hand, since movies often depict the socio-economic happenings of real life, some forms of plot regarding such stories may be displayed. In fact, it is more important for people to be aware of such happenings in the society so that they can take the correct steps as necessary. Moreover, if a person is adult, then he or she must be given the freedom to watch what they want but making sure that it does not negatively impact them. For example, Youtube, Instagram and social media has allowed individuals the independence to fabricate and upload videos as they prefer.
Overall, the proliferation and ease of access to social media have made it mandatory that there must be some sort of censorship of unacceptable entertainment to be distributed. Therefore, I opine that while freedom to watch anything that the thong desires is needed but within certain limitations since this might create social problems.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: Whether; The question whether
The question of whether governments around the world should mit...
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Line 5, column 315, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
... be prohibited to be broadcasted to the general public. For example, in Indonesia, the governi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, then, therefore, while, for example, in fact, sort of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1417.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 275.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15272727273 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90448271379 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.618181818182 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 443.7 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.6344696559 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.818181818 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.2727272727 7.06120827912 160% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129888931542 0.244688304435 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0436760238767 0.084324248473 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0406104466349 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0797302129961 0.151304729494 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0491924812112 0.056905535591 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.