Some people say that governments should focus on reducing environmental pollution and housing problems to help people prevent illness and disease. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Physical health is one of the main subjects of discussion among the public. There comes an opinion that governments should prevent citizens from contracting an illness by tackling environmental and housing problems. I completely agree with this statement.
Firstly, the surrounding environment influences people’s body directly. The introduction of a large number of cars and the development of mass-industries are polluting air and water system in modern life. In this situation, people are easy to suffer from some diseases after drinking and breathing for a long time. For example, Beijing is facing a serious challenge that heavy pollution leads to an increasing patients number. Therefore, the government bears a financial burden since much money is invested in this area. Thus, the key to protect citizens from illness is to pay more attention to the basic living environment.
Secondly, solving housing problems is another efficient way to ensure people’s physical fitness. It is obvious that more and more employees cannot afford a house or even an apartment, especially in a big city. The dramatic price of this basic need makes citizens suffering high living pressure. In this case, they have to earn more money without considering about body health. As a result, we can see that the health condition of young people is getting worse in recent years. There was an example that some employees working in Shenzhen choose to end their lives in the ’30s because of the house price. Therefore, it is necessary for the government to adopt a related policy to control the housing market. After solving the living problem of most citizens, illness and disease could be prevented naturally.
In conclusion, I totally agree with the opinion that it is important for governments to pay attention to pollution and living problem. Therefore, citizens could enjoy a healthy life. In the future, the investment in these two areas may need to be increased.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 98, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, for example, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1662.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 315.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27619047619 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89064310946 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.584126984127 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 510.3 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.4012783781 49.4020404114 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 83.1 106.682146367 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.75 20.7667163134 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.15 7.06120827912 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212433410834 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0565418418347 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0494182178698 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127810711154 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0261144188445 0.056905535591 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 50.2224549098 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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