Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
In modern times, the issue of music's effects for people has become highly controversial. Some people believe that music is a good way of gathering people of different cultures and ages together. I partially agree with this idea and, in this essay, I will provide some arguments to support my opinion.
Generally speaking, there are two main reasons why some people believe that music is an efficient way of gathering people of various cultures and ages together. Perhaps, the most obvious reason is that music is universal. For example, in all around the world, there are a plethora of kinds of music, such as jazz, country, pop and, hiphop. The result of universal music is that everybody can have conversation with each other easily, which in turn leads to new friendships so gathering together. Another reason of the idea is that health of people with psychological problems may be better with music. Unlike in the past, psychological services have improved but some old cures are still effective. According to a research which is completed by John Hopkins University, if people who have depression, anxiety or drug addiction gather and listen their cultures' music, they can have a strong weapon to tackle their psychological problems. This is because, they feel stronger when they gather and listen the same music.
Despite these, there are also several arguments against the idea that music is an efficient way of gathering people of various cultures and ages together. Firstly, this is a lie that music makes people from different cultures gathered. Although, almost all people like music, some people hate music because of various problems. A good illustration of this is that, the best author of Turkey, Iskender has a hearth ilness so he is not able to listen to some music types. This is because, listening music can be harmful for his body and it can also cause heart attack. Secondly, even if some people like to listen same kinds of music, they can not gather because their generations are totally different. Furthermore, people from two different cultures would prefer to listen different types of music, so, bringing people together with music is unrealistic.
In my opinion, it must be said that music's effects has become a complex issue with no easy solutions. In my opininon, all things considered, I believe quite strongly that music is a effective way of gathering people of different cultures and ages together. If cultural music types had been shared by people, our world would have been a better place for us.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 181, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... I believe quite strongly that music is a effective way of gathering people of di...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, for example, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 13.1623246493 190% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2119.0 1615.20841683 131% => OK
No of words: 423.0 315.596192385 134% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00945626478 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59834858436 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475177304965 0.561755894193 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 672.3 506.74238477 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.9537198512 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.904761905 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1428571429 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38095238095 7.06120827912 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.323793494382 0.244688304435 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122579166511 0.084324248473 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0811387382163 0.0667982634062 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.241066151304 0.151304729494 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0694878736182 0.056905535591 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 181, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... I believe quite strongly that music is a effective way of gathering people of di...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, for example, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 13.1623246493 190% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2119.0 1615.20841683 131% => OK
No of words: 423.0 315.596192385 134% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00945626478 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59834858436 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475177304965 0.561755894193 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 672.3 506.74238477 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.9537198512 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.904761905 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1428571429 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38095238095 7.06120827912 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.323793494382 0.244688304435 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122579166511 0.084324248473 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0811387382163 0.0667982634062 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.241066151304 0.151304729494 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0694878736182 0.056905535591 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.