Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Nobody can deny that music is of paramount importance for gathering individuals from diverse culture or age groups. However, it is by no means clear that music is the only way to achieve that, as we will see.
On the one hand, we should confess that music do exerts positive influence on developing harmony among us. For instance, in the 2008 Olympic Game’s opening ceremony, as the song named ‘You and Me’ goes ‘we are family’, which made audiences across the world feel like we are living in one Earth village. Those lyrics and rhymes have already shown the power of music, leading to an absence of problems such as discrimination. Furthermore, interests of music may not show too much variation, since we can manifestly see sheer volume of singles, albums, singers or bands, such as Beatles, win world-wide acceptance.
On the other hand, advocates should not neglect other approaches contributed to this issue, for example, books. Since a large amount of influential books or IP might obtain reputation globally, for instance, ‘Harry Potter’ written by J.K.Rowling. In addition, presumably, no matter how old a person is, they have definitely heard about that book. Moreover, the opinion offered in books could be welcomed easily beyond specific linguistic cultures as well, is there any teenager who do not want to experience such kind of magical world in person? In order to fit into different type of people, all they need to do is to talking about the plots from the book they loved, then one thing will lead to another naturally.
To sum up, we can arrive at an undeniable conclusion that although music has the ability to narrow the gap between different aged people coming from various culture, we should never claim that it is the only method to form people together.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 239, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Rowling
...instance, ‘Harry Potter’ written by J.K.Rowling. In addition, presumably, no matter how...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, well, for example, for instance, in addition, kind of, such as, talking about, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1501.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9701986755 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61778161423 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.672185430464 0.561755894193 120% => OK
syllable_count: 465.3 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 47.1117908101 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.083333333 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1666666667 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.5833333333 7.06120827912 192% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154422684748 0.244688304435 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0513578276152 0.084324248473 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0386441481247 0.0667982634062 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0961829354078 0.151304729494 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0294457764752 0.056905535591 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.16 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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