Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages toghther.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
As expected, the public is split over whether music is a good method to link people of different cultures and ages. In response to this controversy, some people insist that music is not an ideal way of communication. Contrary to theirs, I firmly believe that people can understand each other better through music.
Primarily, it is of paramount importance to understand that music lifts the obstacle of language. this point would carry great weight, because it has always been difficult to communicate with someone from another part of the world, while melody can be understood by all. For example, in a party, a piece of brisk and lively music can make unfamiliar people dance together, instead of them being seated at the table silently. Therefore, it is crystal clear that music might be the key to a new friendship.
On top of that, it is also significant to come to the realization that music is also a carrier of historical events. this argument would unsurprisingly enjoy widespread acceptance among the general public, since many songs were created in memory of certain moments in history. For instance, there are numerous songs written during the Anti-Japanese War. Thus, it is apparent that music is a bond between the past and the present, between the old and the young.
Those who hold the opposite view are based on the belief that music might be misunderstood. Indeed, there is a certain amount of truth in their argument but quite honestly, it is more significant to get involved rather than understand the music precisely. Hence, would make more sense.
To conclude, while there are some arguments against music being a good way of communication, I am convinced that there are compelling arguments for doing so. In view of this, it is fair to say that music can narrow the gap between strangers.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, honestly, if, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, for instance, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 13.1623246493 175% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1529.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 307.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98045602606 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75032395349 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.583061889251 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 475.2 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.2083106143 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.5625 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1875 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.3125 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225378460906 0.244688304435 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0700115476708 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0677581044783 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128207838618 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0963480744891 0.056905535591 169% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 78.4519038076 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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