Some people say that teenagers should work part-time and earn money. This way they will learn basic lessons about work and become more disciplined. Others argue that teenagers shouldn't sacrifice their rest and after-school activities to work.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
The idea of teenagers working part-time is a controversial topic. It argued that working at teenage help them to learn about work and become more disciplined, which may be beneficial for later life. However, some argue that teenagers should keep their rest and after school activities as their first preference. In this essay I will discuss both this views and reach my own logical opinion.
Teenage is a high time for learning about the responsibilities of adult life and make oneself more organized. And working part-time besides school can be advantageous. Not only can they earn money but also they can learn the basic lessons about work. Furthermore, with earning money teenagers can learn to manage their expenditure in various things that will help to develop themselves as responsible adults. This way they can become much more disciplined which even contributes to their academic life.
Another view that some people hold is that teenagers should utilize the opportunity of their free time by having rest and indulging themselves into after school activities. This is also important because after a few years they will have involve in so many responsibilities, which means that teenage is a great time for them to enjoy their life. This way they can experience what they actually want and discover the purpose of their lives. And by performing after school activities they will grow themselves as refreshed and knowledgeable individuals that will be essential for their future life.
While both the views have their own advantages, it all comes down to individual preference. Whether someone wants to work or not should be entirely up to them. Otherwise it may have negative consequences in their lives.
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Suggestion: involved
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Suggestion: Otherwise,
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Suggestion:
...e negative consequences in their lives.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 24.0651302605 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1443.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 279.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17204301075 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80511235709 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.541218637993 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 447.3 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.8408209877 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.1875 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4375 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8125 7.06120827912 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.508408284225 0.244688304435 208% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.166359229124 0.084324248473 197% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0836620632089 0.0667982634062 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.305732446988 0.151304729494 202% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.148368152189 0.056905535591 261% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.41 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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