In the last decades, television channels have surged significantly in astounding ways. Some folks think that what kids watch on television controls their behaviour whereas others claim that the total duration of time they put in watching television influences their behaviour. This essay will discuss both sides and reach a relevant conclusion.
To begin with, the exhibition of violent behaviours is one of the adverse outcomes. Since young ones face an uphill struggle to differentiate between what is real and what to believe while watching violence in the television, they tend to imitate about what they are viewing. So these pupils are more likely to display disruptive behaviours, which certainly delay gratification. Next, owing to the excessive advertisements of fat rich diets in the television have led to a substantial change in the eating behaviour of juveniles. For illustration, children are giving top priorities to junk foods as their brains are not fully developed to understand deeply, subsequently leading to growing obesity that remains a paramount risk factor for cardiovascular disease in the course of time.
However, i strongly believe that spending more time in front of television is potentially decisive in altering children's behaviour than what they watch on TV. Primarily, getting lazy is the dominant modification of behaviours in kids. Because of the undivided attention to the television series and countless roots of entertainment, they are likely to adopt sedentary lifestyles and become deadly dull. On the second place, if the children expose themselves to TV shows for lengthy hours, there is a high probability that the sustained exposure will bring about a break in the communication skills. For an example, these addicted youths hardly exchange ideas with the family members and to the outside world which unquestionably prevent them from continuing face to face conversation that is crucial in generating full confidence. This ascertains why the amount of time spent on television can influence the youngsters' behaviour.
To sum up, with the consideration of becoming purely passive and the disruption of good communication, TV films are nowhere near as powerful as the time blown on watching TV in regulating the behaviour of minors.
Essay evaluation report
Next, owing to the excessive advertisements of fat rich diets in the television have led to a substantial change in the eating behaviour of juveniles.
Next, owing to the excessive advertisements of fat rich diets in the television, it has led to a substantial change in the eating behaviour of juveniles.
and to the outside world which unquestionably prevent them from continuing face to face conversation that is crucial in generating full confidence.
description: better not to put a lot of 'which' or 'that' in one sentence, one is enough
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flaws:
the topic is: 'Discuss both views and give your opinion', so better to discuss both views in the second and third paragraphs, and then give opinions at the last paragraph.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.5 out of 9
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 356 350
No. of Characters: 1889 1500
No. of Different Words: 213 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.344 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.306 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.009 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 137 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 112 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 85 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 63 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.733 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.747 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.467 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.308 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.499 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.032 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 909, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'youngsters'' or 'youngster's'?
Suggestion: youngsters'; youngster's
...e spent on television can influence the youngsters behaviour. To sum up, with the consi...
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Line 10, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...gulating the behaviour of minors.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, second, so, whereas, while, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 41.998997996 138% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1936.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 356.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.43820224719 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07331099955 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.609550561798 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 600.3 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.5043975966 49.4020404114 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.066666667 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7333333333 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.33333333333 7.06120827912 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257704550296 0.244688304435 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0712673578411 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0825222334135 0.0667982634062 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156683855406 0.151304729494 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0441768873292 0.056905535591 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.57 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.39 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 78.4519038076 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.