While some people say that young people learn useful skills by playing electronic and computer games, I would argue that playing electronic and computer games is a waste of time.
On the one hand, it is said that electronic and computer games can provide young people with useful skills such as logical thinking. For instance, spending time on playing puzzles help players focus on finding solutions. Players who want to get high scores must enlarge their knowledge. Secondly, youngers can learn teamwork skills by playing these games. To use a common example of this practice, the game called League of Legends demands the cooperation between players. Therefore, players must play together with active attitudes to become winners. Finally, playing electronic and computer games allows players improve their hand - eyes coordination.
On the other hand, my own view is that young people who play electronic and computer games are wasting their time. Usually, students have very little time to study and they must study hard if they want to have a bright future. Focusing on games makes the youth generation easily addicted it and always think about it. Therefore, they will waste their time on video games. This is not only time-consuming but also wasting money. Most of the games addicts use their money to buy cards for virtual games. Moreover, playing electronic and computer games too much leads to health problems. Due to the fact that, children spending too much time on playing games, even staying overnight, they will feel very tired in the next morning.
For the reasons mentioned above, it seems to me that young people should not play electronic and computer games and they should spend time on studying because playing virtual games is time-consuming.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for instance, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1486.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 288.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15972222222 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42854813638 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.548611111111 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 435.6 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.1629897287 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.4117647059 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9411764706 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.70588235294 7.06120827912 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.54323134307 0.244688304435 222% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.180591246497 0.084324248473 214% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.18977897049 0.0667982634062 284% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.40934235871 0.151304729494 271% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.164004295182 0.056905535591 288% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.35 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 78.4519038076 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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