Some people think that advertising aimed at children should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
A majority of people think that advertising aimed at youngsters should be banned . Personally , I completely agree with this view.
There are two main reasons why advertising , which aimed at the children should be restricted . First of all , children put pressure on parents to buy them things . In general , the advertising for children tend to promote their toys or their products , so children can easily be influenced by them . Furthermore , a great deal of negative advertising has affected to children . Many advertisements concentrate on selling products ; they can effortless to create an advertising , which impacts on youngsters's mind.
Apart from the practical disadvantages above , I believe that advertising , which aimed at children should be controlled . Firstly , government should manage the advertisements by law . Government can put high pressure on companies , which don't follow the rules . If the government check the advertising regularly and focus on this problem with strong solution , the advertising aimed at children will be declined . Secondly , parents also have responsibilities to look after the youngsters . Parents have to control the activities of the children when they tend to look for bad advertising , which has sexual, discrimination and negative information. If children do not watch this advertising , producer and companies will think to change and create new way of advertising , which has positive influence on youngsters.
In conclusion , for the reasons I have mentioned above , I strongly believe that advertising aimed at children should be banned .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, if, look, second, secondly, so, apart from, in conclusion, in general, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1336.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 238.0 315.596192385 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.61344537815 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.92775363542 4.20363070211 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.27784437639 2.80592935109 117% => OK
Unique words: 126.0 176.041082164 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.529411764706 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 392.4 506.74238477 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.4661921678 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.0666666667 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8666666667 20.7667163134 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.86666666667 7.06120827912 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 33.0 5.01903807615 657% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.382312318889 0.244688304435 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.150653777147 0.084324248473 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.126715328917 0.0667982634062 190% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.293626416069 0.151304729494 194% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.062508684996 0.056905535591 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 50.2224549098 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.96 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 78.4519038076 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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