Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others believe that are better alternative ways of reducing crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Although a growing number of people feel that one of the main key to decline crime rate is that criminals serve longer prison sentences, it is argued by some that crime figure should be decreased by some constructive ways. I personally agree with the later opinion.
On the one hand, a group of people put forward two main arguments to support the idea that potential criminals can be deterred by longer sentences. According to these people, longer sentences may serve as a deterrent to those who are planning to commit crime. Take burglary as an example. Some thieves may think stealing things from others as an easy task and they will not arrested easily. Even if they are jailed, it would not take a long time and then they can commit burglary again. Another benefit of prolonging the prison sentences is that it could provide opportunities for them to correct their behavior. They may use the extra time effectively by reading a wide range of books and sharing their past experience with other criminals which may lead to broaden their horizons and explore new goals. As a result, the prisoner would understand how their faults have already affected themselves and others after being released, and they will never repeat their illegal acts again.
On the other hand, others, including me argue that there are better alternatives to tackle the issue. Education could be one of the many. Although there is already so many kind of education regarding the prevention of offences at schools, it is still too inadequate to cause a decline in crime rate. Teachers should introduce various types of criminal acts such as murder, burglary, fraud and other things in order that children could determine what actions will be considered as a crime which is to warn the young generation and prevent them from becoming criminals when they grow up. Moreover, governments should expand social media platform in discouraging offences which could increase the awareness of public toward the seriousness and consequences of doing illegal.
By way of conclusion, although extended imprisonment might act as a deterrent against lawbreakers, it seems to me that education and publicity are much more desirable to address the root of the problem.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 375, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'arrest'
Suggestion: arrest
...thers as an easy task and they will not arrested easily. Even if they are jailed, it wou...
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Line 3, column 705, Rule ID: PAST_EXPERIENCE_MEMORY[1]
Message: Use simply 'experience'.
Suggestion: experience
...a wide range of books and sharing their past experience with other criminals which may lead to ...
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Line 5, column 168, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun kind seems to be countable; consider using: 'many kinds'.
Suggestion: many kinds
... the many. Although there is already so many kind of education regarding the prevention o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, moreover, regarding, so, still, then, kind of, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 7.85571142285 242% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1869.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 370.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05135135135 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63804413239 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578378378378 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 579.6 506.74238477 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.5516613299 49.4020404114 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.8125 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.125 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.9375 7.06120827912 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161812663573 0.244688304435 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0479636536292 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0482709829735 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101395013283 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0596472162963 0.056905535591 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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