Some people think that children should learn to compete, but others think that they should be taught to cooperate with others. What's your opinion??
Parents have had many difficulties in finding out the best way of learning for their children as they have increasingly become aware of the importance's upbringing. It is agreed that competition can help their children gain most exellent achievement, but others oppose to this opinion and strongly believe that collaboration is an superior choice which they can be at the top without competing. Personally, I assert that in some ways, competing with others is actually essential for choosing the best, cooperation sometimes becomes most suitable way people should do.
On the one hand, there are two main benefits they get from competitions. First of all, rivalry motivates children to accelerate their efforts to attain the best result in both education and pther activities. They begin working hard to rank first and then they can understand the values of hard work. They gradually create a diligent work habit, so this helps them stand first everywhere. Secondly, competitional values help children form their self-independence and self-confidence. During all competitions they join in, they have to believe in themselves to make their own decisions without regretting. Not only are there a variety of examinations at school, but children have to face more competitions in taking jobs or in working when they become adults as well. Therefore, competitional values are highly required.
On the other hand, parents should let their children know how important the cooperation is. Undeniably, nobody can be perfect in every aspect. The aim of cooperation is to imrove this part. They talk, listen to what others think of and learn. This is a valuable opportunity for them to exchange knowledge between them. Next, collaboratiom helps people increase the effectiveness and gain better marks in education and work. In fact, two people is surely greater than a person. This is the reason explains why many people work in a company.
In conclusion, you have to compete with others in some cases, but you sometimes need to work in groups to have good results.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, in conclusion, in fact, first of all, in some cases, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1725.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 332.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19578313253 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94656991735 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578313253012 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 528.3 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.6459402212 49.4020404114 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.25 106.682146367 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6 20.7667163134 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.05 7.06120827912 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 8.67935871743 196% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247114313376 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0705163924648 0.084324248473 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0741900874192 0.0667982634062 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148343130592 0.151304729494 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0716982489712 0.056905535591 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.0946893788 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.58 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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