Some people think that cultural traditions may be destroyed when they are used as money-making attractions aimed at tourists. Others believe that it is the only way to help traditions to remain in the world. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
people have different views about whether the tour destination should be commercialized or not. While some believe that using cultural traditions as an earning area which will bring some negative effects, I argue that this is a good way to help remain the cultural traditions and expand their cultural traditions in the world.
On the one hand, there are various reasons why people believe that companies are used as money-making attractions for tourist which have some downsides. First of all, over-commercialized can make a big threat to cultural authenticity. For example, people in the world will not think those cultural tradition areas, they have not to a broaden their horizon to connect with local destinations that they will think that places are amusement areas to help them reduce stress. Besides, the blind expansion of tourism would negatively impact the maintenance of traveling environment. For example, a local place has lots of tour destination, this can lead to a lack of funding for remaining and maintenance of local museums or historical sites in those places.
In spite of these arguments, I believe that expansion tourist in cultural traditions areas can make some advantages. Firstly, attracting visitors from the introduction of cultural traditions with people who live in other nations. For example, if people can extend their culture with the world, their country can earn lots of money to keep the local museums or historical sites in their nation. Second, commercialization can arouse the public’s awareness of cultural preservation. For instance, people live in other areas who can broaden their horizon when they visit those places and respect their cultural traditions.
In summarize, although using cultural traditions as a making-money destination will have negative effects, I think that this is also a better measure to help the development and maintenance of our cultural traditions.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: People
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...tural tradition areas, they have not to a broaden their horizon to connect with local des...
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Suggestion: lots of tours
...ronment. For example, a local place has lots of tour destination, this can lead to a lack of...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, firstly, if, second, so, then, while, as to, for example, for instance, i think, first of all, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1635.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41390728477 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0352247627 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.503311258278 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 505.8 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.9725690051 49.4020404114 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.769230769 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2307692308 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.84615384615 7.06120827912 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.316626941259 0.244688304435 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120336779163 0.084324248473 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0852270229668 0.0667982634062 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223730713493 0.151304729494 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0565912949018 0.056905535591 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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