Some people think the family has the most powerful influence on children's development. Others，however, believe that other things have greater effects. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
In this day and age, children’s development is affected by tons of factors. There is little doubt that family plays a crucial role in children growing up, but I would argue some other factors like schools, the circle of friends also have a great influence on the development of children.
Many people are advocates of family environment affecting kid’s development greatly, possibly because family members can get in touch with their children every day, and their behavior may have a direct influence on their children. For instance, some bad behavior such as smoking and drinking wine can be imitated by children when parents do these things on a regular basis. As a result, children may form these behaviors in such a young age which have a negative influence on their future life. In contrast to this, parents who always teach their children how to share things with others, how to respect others can make children’s behaviors more socially acceptable. Consequently, children can grow up in a healthy environment.
Some people argue that some other reasons like teachers may be an important affection on children’s development due to the fact that these children obtain a great deal of knowledge from their teachers. The knowledge they get at a young age holds the key to their growth because they can distinguish right from wrong. As an example, schools are places where teacher impart knowledge into students, they can not only study moral principle and behavior norms that are important to their personalities, but also some core subjects such as science and technology which play an important role in their careers. If the school can emphasize the importance of doing the above things, children are likely to develop more successfully.
In my opinion, children have their own life circles making a big difference in their development. They hang out with their peers, such as playing sports, chatting together and so on. As a result, they can learn tons of things no matter positive or negative as a result of communicating with their friend, and form what they got can also affect their life effective.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, may, so, for instance, in contrast, such as, as a result, in contrast to, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1784.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 351.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08262108262 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80503393124 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54415954416 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 540.0 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.323361992 49.4020404114 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.428571429 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0714285714 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.28571428571 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164880538783 0.244688304435 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0699054771134 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0580558035299 0.0667982634062 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116820467245 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0445708233602 0.056905535591 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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