Some people think that famous people can help international aid organizations to draw attention to important problems. Others believe that the celebrities can make the problems seem less important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Volunteer work provides an organization with a free resource to help it meet its missions or goals which often include filling the gap between individuals or community’s resource and those provided by the government. That famous people take part in these volunteer plans is not fresh news. There are two opposite opinions that whether they help to draw attention to problems or make the problems less important. In my view, I partly agree with this aforementioned statement.
It is true that when it comes to charities invite celebrities become their brand ambassador to attract the attention of the community. Famous people can create a global phenomenon due to not only they have a huge amount of international fans but also mass media all over the world. The admirers, especially crazy fans, who have a trend to follow what their idols did, therefore, the aid organizations get the best out of it to call upon everyone for donation. Typically, Angelina Jolie – a Hollywood star, becomes an ambassador of UNICEF organization, thanks to her who paid nearly 7 million USD to relieve millions of patients or HIV-infected children especially the countries in the North Africa.
However, on the other hand, celebrities want to take the advantages of voluntary to polish their reputation. For instance, in 2017, David Beckham was accused for being on behalf of the UNICEF’s ambassador to gain profit. Specifically, he asked for £ 6685,000 from a charity for a business class flight to attend an event in Asia. Beside, he never spend his private money to support this organization, he improves his business activities only instead of helping children or suffering people. This news created a wave of negative in the community and stole the trust of others.
In conclusion, I think that people should distinguish between donation and building reputation and act intelligently.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 73, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'meets'?
Suggestion: meets
...ization with a free resource to help it meet its missions or goals which often inclu...
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Line 5, column 254, Rule ID: CURRENCY_SPACE[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually written without any whitespace: '£6685'.
Suggestion: £6685
...gain profit. Specifically, he asked for £ 6685,000 from a charity for a business class...
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Line 5, column 353, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'spends'.
Suggestion: spends
...tend an event in Asia. Beside, he never spend his private money to support this organ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, therefore, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in my view, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1587.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 306.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1862745098 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01325088434 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.66339869281 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 495.9 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.056549654 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.357142857 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8571428571 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.42857142857 7.06120827912 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191419792934 0.244688304435 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0587279969756 0.084324248473 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0714159468446 0.0667982634062 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102362071349 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0588059763986 0.056905535591 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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