At present, debilitating illness is one of the major healthy issues in the world since overweight trigger some of diabetes case. As related, number of overweight has been growing up especially in children. Some people believe that government has responsibility for the rising , another part of society blame that parents have the biggest portion to their children, I believe that government and parents have take into the account about this conditions.
To begin, this is government task since number of overweight in children increase significantly. One of the major reasons is raising amount of junk food restaurant in the whole country. For example, the fast food restaurant has been developing well by using franchise system and the number still counting until now. Since this food has less beneficial nutrients to human body and enormous fat percentage, government needs restricting the policy about it. Then government also takes a part in making the rule to educate the individuals about having balance nutrients. In fact, government provides little information about healthy foods. For instance, rarely society find in media about how essential is healthy food in control obesity.
Besides the government, parents also experience the higher portions in educating their child about food, health, and school. Firstly, the philosophy about everything begins from home, it makes sense that environment of home reflect to children habit. For example, mostly overweight children have uncontrolled eating habit by their parents, so children prefer consuming sweet and potatoes without knowing the dire effects to their body. Secondly, parents are busy in working, so they cannot manage well about their children meal such as they just provide some money to their children for having a lunch.
To conclude, I confirm that ministry and parents probably make conditions of overweight in children worse. Therefore, government and parents need to work together in order to decrease the illness.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 107, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'some of', you should use 'the' ('some of the diabetes') or simply say ''some diabetes''.
Suggestion: some of the diabetes; some diabetes
...s in the world since overweight trigger some of diabetes case. As related, number of overweight ...
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Line 1, column 276, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...rnment has responsibility for the rising , another part of society blame that pare...
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Line 1, column 409, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'taken'.
Suggestion: taken
...elieve that government and parents have take into the account about this conditions....
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Line 1, column 437, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...arents have take into the account about this conditions. To begin, this is governme...
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Line 3, column 587, Rule ID: HAVE_A_BREAKFAST[1]
Message: When we speak of types of meals, the article is not required: 'having lunch'.
Suggestion: having lunch
...rovide some money to their children for having a lunch. To conclude, I confirm that ministry ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1684.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 309.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.4498381877 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71741598505 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585760517799 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 513.9 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.5825366403 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.25 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3125 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.125 7.06120827912 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0995099241147 0.244688304435 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0326106707672 0.084324248473 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0350871754575 0.0667982634062 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.063721930569 0.151304729494 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0374127617984 0.056905535591 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.33 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.