Some people think that the government is responsible for the rise in childhood obesity, while others think it is the fault of the parents. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
Obesity is very simple term, it define as the lazyness and fatty structure of the children. It impact the health and rise so many diseases to the health. For instance, the topic consider that the should the reason of obesity in children the both hand of two specific person; government or parents? I will explain the both sides in the following paragraphs.
On the one side, the mostly mankind think about the government is responsible for the obesity in children. Broadly speaking, there are two main reasons behind this. The first and foremost reason is the adultration. Therefore, the adultration is define as the bad or unhygienic food to the people. There is no mistake of parents because if in market the adultrated food came the people in that condition both that food and it creates the obesity. As well as, the responsibility of check the food properly of the government. Apart from that, the only government have rights to control all activities effectively. The second and important reason in under this the government not open the education facilities like; gym, stadium, and so on. Moving ahead, it's all facilities provide to children free of cost for there health benefits. So the children fit there self.
On the flip side, the people believe that the parents are responsible for the obesity in children. However, the main reason in under this the busy schedule of the parents. Nowadays, the both mother or father do the job and they have not time to cook food for there children so that is the main reason of obesity in children. Therefore, the parents prefer the junk food for self so how they give the lesson to their children to avoid the junk food. The another reason is the control of parents on there children is less. As a result, the children eat according to their wish. They do not think good to permission from there parents. Because parents give more freedom to their children and not control the behaviour and activities of the children. For example, the survey conducted by World health organisation of india and result of survey was the 70% had children effect by obesity beacuse their parents are not guided properly.
In conclusion, there is a neutral feedback beacuse it's responsibility of both government and as well as parents. Therefore, the government should conduct the seminar, campus, and awareness programme for the impact of junk food and control the adulteration of food. On the other hand, the parents should care about the diet and provide fresh and home-made food to their children. So the children do not face the problem of obesity.
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Obesity is very simple term, it define as the lazyness and fatty structure of ...
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... children the both hand of two specific person; government or parents? I will explain ...
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...ltration. Therefore, the adultration is define as the bad or unhygienic food to the pe...
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... gym, stadium, and so on. Moving ahead, its all facilities provide to children free...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, second, so, therefore, well, apart from, broadly speaking, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2150.0 1615.20841683 133% => OK
No of words: 441.0 315.596192385 140% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87528344671 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58257569496 4.20363070211 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6033385428 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.424036281179 0.561755894193 75% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 660.6 506.74238477 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 16.0 2.52805611222 633% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 16.0721442886 168% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.9691232581 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.6296296296 106.682146367 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3333333333 20.7667163134 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.03703703704 7.06120827912 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 3.4128256513 293% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176968798816 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0553405971576 0.084324248473 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0601772618636 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123397555951 0.151304729494 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0153053671313 0.056905535591 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 13.0946893788 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.26 8.58950901804 85% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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