Some people think that government should give financial support to artists, musicians, poets. Others think it is a waste of money. Discuss both view and give your opinion
The governmental financial support to artists, musicians and poets has evolved as a major topic of concern in modern society. While it is argued that the artists may not deserved to receive this support, I strongly believe that the government should back them up.
Some people believe that this trend could be wasteful. This is because they may use this budget to invest in promoting development of arts. The government could change curriculum which integrate arts subject in school curriculum. This will raise children awareness of the arts and help them appreciate their own culture values. Not only is it a sustainable way to promote the arts among youngsters but also less cost-effective for the government. They can spend this budget for other urgent problems such as healthcare system or welfare for society.
However, I’m in favor of the idea that supporting for artists, musicians and poets could be beneficial in some extend. The primary for my belief is that this arts would embody traditional cultures and customs. For example, a number of songs, poems, lyrics or even paintings were composed throughout history since it stores aesthetic values and course of history events. Without this masterpieces, people could lack spiritual and emotional needs, which may lead to decrease work or study productivity and even accelerate stress level in fast-paced society. Another visible benefit is that it is masterpieces that bring precious revenue for the country. Thanks to governmental investment, artists have great motivation to compose more masterpiece because they may not concern about their living. This trend will attract more tourists around the world, so tourist industry contribute a great deal of profit for the total GDP helping the country thrive. Take Puerto rico as an example. Only by a song named “ Despacito ” could survive one city from bankrupt and poverty to one of the most tourist attractions in the world.
In conclusion, although many people claim that investing financial support for arts, poems, songs can be not worthwhile, I personally think that government support for the artists could bring more advantages than shortcomings.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, may, so, while, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1845.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 346.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3323699422 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72574612493 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 176.041082164 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595375722543 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 550.8 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.0693909433 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.5 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2222222222 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.94444444444 7.06120827912 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0996764753354 0.244688304435 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.031869486368 0.084324248473 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0448949064803 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0865896466765 0.151304729494 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0522368424737 0.056905535591 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.33 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 78.4519038076 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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