Some people think that government should not give international aid since they have disadvantaged people like unemployment and homeless in their own country To what extent do you you agree or disagree

Essay topics:

Some people think that government should not give international aid since they have disadvantaged people like unemployment and homeless in their own country.
To what extent do you you agree or disagree?

The richest countries have been the primary source of poorer states for the entire history of humanity. The international assistance is considered undesirable by a some part of our society since a number of internal issues such as providing citizens with jobs and homes have not been fully addressed. I strongly agree with this opinion, because people should tackle their own problems first and the progress is easier to control from inside.

Since a budget of a country consists from taxes that only locals pay, the priorities of their troubles should be higher. In addition to the moral aspect of this phenomenon, providing homeless individuals with a place to live and work is able to boost significantly the economy of a particular place. It means, that the population would become wealthier, thus public authorities would collect more capital, which also allows to speed up the developement of this country as well as other places. For example, according to the analytics of the United Nations organization, approximately eighty five per cent of a GDP growth worldwide is achieved with local investments and only 15 per cent with international support. In other words, lives of local citizens should be improved before assistance to other states is rendered.

In addition to the above-mentioned aspect, spendings of international authorities is harder to influence. Therefore, foreign leaders have an opportunity to waste it to irrelevant projects or even steal it. Hence, the efficiency of local funds is much higher in comparison to outer finances.

In conclusion, I truly believe that citizens should address their issues first since they earn their money and they are able to control them productively.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 425, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'speeding'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: speeding
...collect more capital, which also allows to speed up the developement of this country as ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, if, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as well as, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1447.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 274.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28102189781 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95808942333 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.609489051095 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 458.1 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.7768171778 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.583333333 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8333333333 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5833333333 7.06120827912 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177576012578 0.244688304435 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.057880807892 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0498738174398 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106689126639 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0590371956375 0.056905535591 104% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.4 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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