Some people think that government wasting money on the arts, and this money could be spent elsewhere. To what extend do you agree or disagree?
It is often said that allocation of money which is installed by the government on arts is the form of wasting financial resources and the money should spent on other sphere of society. I believe that it would be sensible decision which the government distributed its money on improving social, educational and health care problems rather than support arts.
To begin, there are some positive points which can demonstrate beneficial side of giving the money for supporting arts. The first one is that each art work are created with particular style and fineness, in turn, these works assist to improve decoration of facilities. The government donates the money to show the masterpiece work in art competitions or galleries in order to use them decorate the buildings. Another one is public might reach the people who are creator by introducing art work. These kinds of people assist to develop creative ideas.
Notwithstanding, in my opinion, the government should spent its money on other purposes rather than give it art. For example, health care takes the first position in every society and this field involves renovating remedies or medical instruments annually. So that there are much more money can satisfy these needs. Alternatively, in order to improve the education system government should give much more attention than art. Because, schools, colleges and university should be provided with high technologies and professional teachers. It would be good idea which the state provides citizens with other opportunities such as convenient transportation system, industry and others.
Taking everything into consideration, although art work appeal people with its attractiveness, from my standpoint, government should give its financial resources on other fields which were aforementioned above.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, so, for example, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1532.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 279.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.49103942652 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97600705269 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.58064516129 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 473.4 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.8264175576 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.428571429 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9285714286 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.64285714286 7.06120827912 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201779976362 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0745053784292 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0581964402417 0.0667982634062 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129520773864 0.151304729494 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0695549573321 0.056905535591 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.56 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.