Some people think that governments should ban dangerous sports while others think that people should have freedom to do any sports or activity Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Some people think that governments should ban dangerous sports, while others think that people should have freedom to do any sports or activity. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

It is widely acknowledged that playing sports is a very common form of recreation. However, the question of whether a halt should be put into the operation of some risky sports has been a topic of debate. While a school of thought believes that all physical activities that can threaten participants' lives should be forbidden, others claim that because of citizens’ freedom, they can play all kinds of sports they want. Personally, I side with the latter view.

On the one hand, It is understandable why some advocate the former view. The key rationale is that extreme sports are very dangerous and people taking part in these sports may be seriously injured even if the risk-takers are fully armed with protective gears. For example, a lot of coverage has been given last year to a woman being attacked by a shark when she was scuba diving, even equipped with a protective vest and equipment. Therefore, It seems reasonable why some extreme sports or activities should be banned by governments.

On the other hand, there are several reasons why people argue that freedom is the basic right of humans so they can participate in any sports and activities. The first reason is that extreme sports or activities provide players with a wide range of experiences, skills and life lessons which they may not be able to find in other leisure activities. In addition, these extreme sports have a lot of difficulties and challenges that push people to their limitations and make them become braver. Thus, it also seems sensible to say that adventurous sports are also advantageous to some point.

While there are some justifications for prohibiting all extreme sports and activities, I believe that it is better for people to do any sports they like.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 93, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
...ery common form of recreation. However, the question of whether a halt should be put into the operation...
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Line 1, column 434, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...kinds of sports they want. Personally, I side with the latter view. On the one...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, in addition, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1458.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 295.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94237288136 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77161713338 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.55593220339 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 454.5 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.2960466408 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.153846154 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6923076923 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.84615384615 7.06120827912 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313521615335 0.244688304435 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112891326341 0.084324248473 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0638834471393 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202115307988 0.151304729494 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0181171374211 0.056905535591 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 78.4519038076 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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