some people think the increasing business and culture contact between countries bring many positive developments. Others say that it causes the loss of national identities. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Essay topics:

some people think the increasing business and culture contact between countries bring many positive developments. Others say that it causes the loss of national identities. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Nowadays, exchange of both culture and tradition as well as exchange of goods burgeoning business between countries which brings myriad of benefits. Though some folk think it is positive development, others urge that it cause the loss of national identity. I reckon that proliferating business and culture contact bring positive development between countries.

At the outset, every human beings have their own thoughts and follow their own culture. Therefore, a nation can be well developed. For instance, tourism has increased the economy of a country,also countries are enable to widespread their own culture and annex their thoughts which stands as a paragon. In order to get variety of products it is necessary to boost-up business. For example, Oppo, China's mobile company, sells their product in India owing to which citizen of India get variety in mobiles and helps to get better opportunity which stands as an epitome. In addition, knowledge of a person can also expand and become familiar with different culture and traditions. To quote an example, a person can learn different types of languages and will not face any difficulties in future.

On the other hand, some believe that a nation will lose their own identity. By accepting different culture they will forget their own culture and culture give an identity to the citizens of a country which will be lost in within some period of time. If business is sky-rocketed it brings a ripple consequences. To cite an example, because of import of mobile phones of different nations in India, Nokia company who sells mobiles in India is vanished due to which India lost identity in market in terms of mobile.

In conclusion, for the growth of the countries increase in business and culture plays a consequential part and brings positive development. Henceforth, I believe that it better for a countries growth.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: , also
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Suggestion: enabled
...economy of a country,also countries are enable to widespread their own culture and ann...
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Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
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Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... be lost in within some period of time. If business is sky-rocketed it brings a ri...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'countries'' or 'country's'?
Suggestion: countries'; country's
...ceforth, I believe that it better for a countries growth.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, if, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, i reckon, in addition, in conclusion, as well as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1572.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 305.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15409836066 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79401210235 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.524590163934 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 498.6 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.9048128454 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.25 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0625 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.25 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237188162425 0.244688304435 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0880199835484 0.084324248473 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0863748946469 0.0667982634062 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181203805906 0.151304729494 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.12314074123 0.056905535591 216% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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