Some people think it is acceptable to use animals for the benefit of humans. Other people think it is wrong to exploit animals for human purposes. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. ( discursive essay)

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Some people think it is acceptable to use animals for the benefit of humans. Other people think it is wrong to exploit animals for human purposes. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. ( discursive essay)

In the contemporary society, there is a growing tendency for people, especially medical researchers, big companies and farmers, to use animals for their benefits such as testing new drugs and products, working in the farm etc. On the other hand, some people hold the opposite opinion that it is better to protect animals, give them a liberated/ free life. As fas as I am concerned, it is necessary to look at both sides/ the negative and positive aspects of the argument before forming an opinion.

To begin with, animals play an vital role in scientific research such as testing new medicine, medical treatments and products. As we know, Animals share many features with humans, scientist use animals to test the safety and effectiveness of newly developed drugs before pilot testing on small groups of patients. Without animal testing, many procedures of new drugs would be extremely unsafe. It means that many medical treatments and goods have been developed from experiments on animals.

Many people, however, argue that it is wrong to cause suffering to animals for the benefit of humans. It is admitted that animals are the member of the Earth, they also have their own right to live under freedom/liberty, which has no hunting and war. The lives of animals should be respected, and Humans have no moral rights to do experiments on animals. Therefore, Individuals should receive the duty to protect the endangered and rare species which play an important role in nature. In addition, There are useful alternative forms of research available now, sush as the use of tissue cell cultures, so that no need to put the animals into the unnecessary suffering. Besides that, technology has largely replaces the use of animals in the fields of transport. So as I said, using animals adequately is not a gorgeous thing.

From what has been discussed above, we may draw safely conclusion that the advantage of protecting animals more significant than its disadvantage, and it will still play an essential role in the future. It is time to concentrate on developing alternative sources of food and methods of research, and allow animals a liberated/free existence.

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Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 29, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...opinion. To begin with, animals play an vital role in scientific research such ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, however, if, look, may, so, still, therefore, in addition, such as, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1812.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 357.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0756302521 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83750874474 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 176.041082164 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577030812325 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 585.9 506.74238477 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.5746827667 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.25 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3125 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.1875 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260978828868 0.244688304435 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0819523449837 0.084324248473 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0563214584964 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146610477317 0.151304729494 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0638662611019 0.056905535591 112% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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