Some people think it is more important for government to spend public money on promoting a healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on the treatment of people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is true that some people argue for more public expenditure on measures to prevent illness by promoting a healthy lifestyle. While this would certainly result in benefits to public health, I disagree with the idea that this should be a higher priority than the treatment of people who are already suffering from illness.
The promotion of a healthy lifestyle to prevent illness is undoubtedly a worthy aim of any government. The sedentary routines of many people make them more prone to the risk of diabetes or heart disease as a result of their inactivity. In modern life, people are so caught up in the pressures of work or study that they neglect the importance of keeping fit. Dependence on the car exacerbates the problem of lack of exercise. Thus, government provision of affordable leisure and sports facilities, coupled with promotion campaigns to keep fit and healthy would certainly be a worthwhile initiative to raise the general level of public health.
However, in the process of decision-making on health matters, I would argue that expenditure should be allocated first to the treatment of people who are ill. Firstly, not all illnesses are the result of unhealthy lifestyle choices by individuals. For example, respiratory disorders are affected by air pollution in cities, while poor sanitation and contaminated drinking water contribute to outbreaks of dysentery and cholera. Secondly, failure to subsidise medicines or to invest in hospitals would certainly lead to many deaths which could have been avoided by timely treatment. Hospitals, for instance, have many roles in providing treatment, not only surgery but also in conducting vital research into the treatment of many life-threatening conditions, such as cancer or asthma.
In conclusion, while promoting healthy living is important, treatment must have priority in health service spending.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 729, Rule ID: MANY_FEW_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Use 'much' or 'little' with uncountable nouns.
Suggestion: much; little
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'firstly', 'however', 'if', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'thus', 'while', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in conclusion', 'such as', 'as a result', 'it is true']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.298461538462 0.247107183377 121% => OK
Verbs: 0.132307692308 0.155533422707 85% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0892307692308 0.0946595960268 94% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0430769230769 0.0501214627716 86% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0184615384615 0.0437548338989 42% => OK
Prepositions: 0.156923076923 0.122226691241 128% => OK
Participles: 0.0430769230769 0.0403226058552 107% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.89355105583 2.80594681477 103% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0338461538462 0.0326793684256 104% => OK
Particles: 0.00307692307692 0.00163938923432 188% => OK
Determiners: 0.0769230769231 0.0861772015684 89% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0246153846154 0.021408717616 115% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00923076923077 0.011925033212 77% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1887.0 1933.35771543 98% => OK
No of words: 297.0 316.048096192 94% => OK
Chars per words: 6.35353535354 6.12580529183 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20517956788 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.434343434343 0.374742101984 116% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.346801346801 0.28420135186 122% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.259259259259 0.203846283523 127% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.20202020202 0.137316102897 147% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89355105583 2.80594681477 103% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.037074148 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59595959596 0.56093040696 106% => OK
Word variations: 65.4402246874 60.7387585426 108% => OK
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0891783567 75% => OK
Sentence length: 24.75 20.7743622355 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.9500708755 49.517814964 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 157.25 127.492653851 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.75 20.7743622355 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.41666666667 0.814263465372 174% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.99599198397 25% => OK
Readability: 59.4301346801 49.1944974215 121% => OK
Elegance: 2.57142857143 1.69124875643 152% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.456224939082 0.332605444948 137% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.129305169185 0.102741220458 126% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0342439979052 0.0668466124924 51% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.625769169257 0.534860350844 117% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.135221293731 0.148594505496 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.197875844809 0.134430193775 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0890176493442 0.0742795772207 120% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.305045734535 0.324371583561 94% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.10235194384 0.0638462369009 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.295277854491 0.228012699653 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115142458009 0.058150111329 198% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.68436873747 46% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.41683366733 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 3.0 5.90881763527 51% => OK
Negative topic words: 7.0 2.5751503006 272% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 1.9629258517 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 10.0 10.4468937876 96% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.