Some people think job satisfaction is more important than job security, while others believe that having a permanent job is better than enjoying the job. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
It is true that some people consider that s secure post is more critical than the work that is full of joy and satisfaction. While I understand that a stable job means a lot, I believe that the benefits of an interesting occupation dose outweigh the drawbacks.
There are two main reasons why people might embrace the work that they can rely on it life-long. The first objection is that these men must to take the responsibility to raise the whole of family members that includes their children, parents or even grandparents. If the company dismisses them, the financial crisis embarks and may lead to homeless, no food to eat and even fights between the members. The second agreement against the unstable job is that the some people’s goal is pursuing a peaceful and calm life. Many people don’t have the ambition toward work, they just enjoy watching a good movie with friends, reading a book alone on weekends.
In spite of the advantages mentioned above, I believe that the sense of accomplishment plays a vital role. Firstly, the satisfaction motivates people to perform well on their work, and they would feel that they are valuable. Therefore, the feeling that they are needed actually bring them confidence, and then the happiness comes with the confidence. At the same time, in the prolong term, doing the thing you are fascinated about can make you more active to learn the new knowledge or advanced technology in the field, and once you lost your job in the company, your ability and capacity can make you easily to find another job again. For example, Steve Jobs lost his post in Apple, but he found his position in Disney, and finally made an amazing animated film in this his business.
In conclusion, it seems to me that the joy and activeness toward job is more important than security and permanence that the work can bring you.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: must; have to
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...permanence that the work can bring you.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, finally, first, firstly, if, may, second, so, then, therefore, well, while, for example, in conclusion, in spite of, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 24.0651302605 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1540.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 321.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79750778816 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58413421355 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.604361370717 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 475.2 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.8972528515 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.461538462 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6923076923 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.9230769231 7.06120827912 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272419346995 0.244688304435 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0831062260406 0.084324248473 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.078655094678 0.0667982634062 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185352375542 0.151304729494 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0661747140614 0.056905535591 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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