Some people think learning musical instruments is a waste of time, while others think it is beneficial in many ways. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Undoubtedly, music is an art and everyone can express their feelings, joys and sorrows by music. A section of society deems that taking an education about musical equipments are not beneficial because it is not helpful in an academic education as well as reading and writing are more essential for them. Whilst, another neglect this notion and support that music tools are providing relaxation from stress as well as select these as careers. However, this easy will shed light on the both views along with my prospective.
The one school of thought believes that learn about music instruments are not better for people as it is wastage of time. Moreover, music tools are not assist humans in their academic studies to achieve desirable marks in their exams. On the other hand, musical equipment’s are major factors to distract their focus on education. In addition to this, reading as well as writing skills are crucial for people rather than learning music because it helps to polish the academic fields of masses to make them successful in upcoming periods. Even though, writing and reading skills are not only improving people’s academic level but also beneficial for brain power as well. For example, a survey conducted by media reported that university degree play necessary part in humans career as compared with knowledge of musical instruments.
The another school of thought said that it is crucial for people to get knowledge about musical equipments because they are helpful for them in many manners. Furthermore, the main is that nowadays a vast amount of stress are increasing drastically and reached to peak at higher level among humans due to their workloads so that is why musical tools are mandatory for them to provide comfortable and convenient stress free life. Similarly, if a human who can learning about these instruments such as guitar, piano, flute and etcetera how to play it than it is useful for them to reduce their mental burden and they can notice dramatic decline in their stress levels. The another factor is that a majority of masses pressuring learning of musical tools as their career which in films, completions as well as music industries and eligible to earn bread and butter . For instance,Shankar Mahadeva a famous singer and music composer of Indian Bollywood industry, he have huge knowledge about playing musical instruments and he expand his this talent into musical world and gain lots name and fame.
In my perception, it is necessary to give focus on an Education by humans because it is assist them to build up their futures. While, learning about musical equipments are essential for them to get freedom from their regular boring schedule, express feelings and emotions as well as select it to develop their career.
In conclusion, although, an education are important for human’s future and make them good, responsible citizens as well but music help them to earn income and satisfaction.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, similarly, so, well, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 13.1623246493 175% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 10.4138276553 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 24.0651302605 208% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 41.998997996 138% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2488.0 1615.20841683 154% => OK
No of words: 486.0 315.596192385 154% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11934156379 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69525374022 4.20363070211 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68285035703 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 176.041082164 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493827160494 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 773.1 506.74238477 153% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.4690384894 49.4020404114 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.222222222 106.682146367 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.33333333333 7.06120827912 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146174092863 0.244688304435 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0573711598688 0.084324248473 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0353319187677 0.0667982634062 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0845476561574 0.151304729494 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0384597963677 0.056905535591 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 78.4519038076 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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