Some people think that the main purpose of schools is to teach children to be a good citizen or worker rather than to benefit them as individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is true that almost school try to help a student to become a good inhabitant or employee instead of developing their personal skills. I completely agree with this.
On the one hand, there are some reasons why the school’s role is turning children into good members of the community. One reason is that the school is the right place to prepare the young generation a lot of essential skills to enter adult life. Studying under supervision and variety of teaching strategies, the student will be motivated to study hard to make the grade and have a good grasp of information quickly. Moreover, most of the schools offer a wide range of extra-curricular activities. Therefore, students can be easier to expand their knowledge as well as develop social skills. This helps them find it easy to integrate into society.
On the other hand, apart from these reasons expressed above, I believe that nurturing children to grow individual is the mission of family instead of school. Firstly, parents are very influential in shaping their children’s personality. For instance, Mozart, whose love of music comes from his father, is one of the greatest composers in the world. Secondly, in the family, parents can detect their offspring’s skills easily to assist them in improvement. The fact that the number of students is more than the number of teachers. For example, when I was a student, there were thirty or forty members in the class that was managed by a lecturer in my ex-class. Then, he does not have enough time as well as ability to help each other. Hence, teenagers cannot develop to the full unless family coordinate their efforts with teachers.
In conclusion, it is certainly true that the numerous schools do not focus on developing individual student’s skill because it is more important for them to help their student become a good man or women.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, hence, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, apart from, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as well as, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1563.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 314.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97770700637 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84999820284 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.582802547771 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 484.2 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.8958665062 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.9411764706 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4705882353 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4117647059 7.06120827912 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.134811830292 0.244688304435 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0411475378703 0.084324248473 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0332558192226 0.0667982634062 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.088427825109 0.151304729494 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0312864016496 0.056905535591 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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