Some people think that the main purpose of schools is to teach children to be a good citizen or worker rather than to benefit them as individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is true that almost school try to help student to become a good inhabitant or employee instead of developing their personal skills. I completely agree with this idea.
On the one hand, all students are mostly touch how to become the good man or women. Firstly, the education in lots of school focus on teaching the general knowledge. Although this give student the good awareness for developing, they do not recognize their individual strength. For example, the lecturer gives the same knowledge for all of students and evaluate them in the same way. Then, they do not care about their advantages and just try to follow their teacher’s instruction. Secondly, most of schools are in pressure to educate student to be a good citizen. If someone is criminal and he used to study in that school, its reputation will be affected.
On the other hand, there are a variety of reasons why helping student improve their strength is not the most important criteria in school. One reason is the number of students is more than teacher. For instance, when I was a student, there are thirty or forty members in class that was managed by a teacher in my ex-class. Therefore, he does not have enough time as well as ability to help each person develop their skills. Furthermore, in the countryside, the condition for children is not good. If a child is talent in singing, it is so hard to him to become a singer because of the lack of opportunity for practicing and showing.
In conclusion, it is certainly true that the numerous schools do not focus on developing individual student’s skill because it is more important for them to help their student become a good man or women.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 42, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'touched'.
Suggestion: touched
...n the one hand, all students are mostly touch how to become the good man or women. Fi...
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Line 2, column 496, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the schools') or simply say ''most schools''.
Suggestion: most of the schools; most schools
...r teacher's instruction. Secondly, most of schools are in pressure to educate student to b...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as well as, it is true, in the same way, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1390.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 292.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7602739726 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73683923255 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.534246575342 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 432.9 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.6698768423 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.875 106.682146367 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.25 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.125 7.06120827912 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130000679157 0.244688304435 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0517314371499 0.084324248473 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0419643529731 0.0667982634062 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0873609726273 0.151304729494 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.032898884937 0.056905535591 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 13.0946893788 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 12.4159519038 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 78.4519038076 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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