Some people think that in the modern world we are more dependent on each other while others think that people have become more independent Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Some people think that in the modern world we are more dependent on each other, while others think that people have become more independent. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

People have different views about whether or not human tend to independent in the advance social. While some people purpose that humanity relier on other people, I believe that, nowaday human become more and more independent than the past.
On the one hand, nowaday humanity are ofter rely on other financial support. Many adults live with their parents. Those adults have no occupation, no social life and thus no money. For example, a 30 years old man named Ivan in London. He has a master degree but has no job. He stays at home day after day, waiting for his mother to serve him food. Those storieslike I just said about Ivan are very popular in some countries, such as Spain, Chile and Vietnam.
On the other hand, there are two principal reasons why many people do believe that we are independent human in the modern world. Firstly, youth people know how to earn money very early. Children at high school can do part-time jobs when they are in summer vacation. After that, they can learn how to spend their own money without asking their dad or mom. Secondly, modern people have a very good potential skill, it is critical thinking. Critical tinking, especially in children, may help them to think carefully and quickly. For instance, a child with idea of this thinking method can easy decide whether or not that it should take part in a course.
In conclusion, there are some reasons which indicate people are tend to dependent, but in my opinion, nowaday people are truly independent

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Average: 6.1 (2 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 35, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
People have different views about whether or not human tend to independent in the advanc...
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Line 3, column 598, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...of this thinking method can easy decide whether or not that it should take part in a course. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1235.0 1615.20841683 76% => OK
No of words: 260.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01553427287 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32677685491 2.80592935109 83% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.626923076923 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 391.5 506.74238477 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.7713500676 49.4020404114 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.6470588235 106.682146367 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2941176471 20.7667163134 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.70588235294 7.06120827912 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260592131578 0.244688304435 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0676965398242 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0752634168166 0.0667982634062 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15719461602 0.151304729494 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0795925196302 0.056905535591 140% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 13.0946893788 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 50.2224549098 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.3001002004 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.68 12.4159519038 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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