Some people think that in the modern world we are more dependent on each other, while others think that people have become more independent.
 Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In the past , when modern technology has appeared , human seem to be closer with nature because farming , retail trade , livestock and poultry breeding are the most popular activities in their daily life . But everything has changed nowadays . People depends more on each other and Information technology . However , there are some opposite ideals that people have become more independent in the modern world . Now we are going to discuss about this issue .
Currently , people 's speed of working is very high and they don't have much time to take care of their children so that they need the supporting from grandparents or baby sisters . One of the main reasons make people depend on each other is that they want to promote in their career ; thus, they have to create the relationship with some powerful people. In addition , these days modern technology has a big effect on people . For example today there are a lot of social media like Facebook , Zalo , Twister, Weibo and so on that connect people together and make them addicted to.Moreover, outfit get a lot of attention of people and it is one of the most important parts of a human being which make them look luxurious, gentle manlike ,dignified . Therefore ,trapping ,jewelry, beauty care are also dominate the interest and the dependence of people, especially women .
On the other hand the independence is also clearly expressed in the present life . For instant , some ambitious person like student who have the different and independence thoughts . They choose to study aboard to broaden their horizons ,have new experiences at a new land and emotions never experienced when living far away hometown . They do the work they love to feed themselves, build their own family, a private home, have a private life without having to depend on anyone . If everyone has a voluntary independence, in a near future a civilized society will be formed
On my view when we are young, we can depend on parents or adults around us, but when we are older, I think we need to limit this problem and have personal thoughts and opinions to make our life more meaningful

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, moreover, so, therefore, thus, for example, i think, in addition, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1743.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 355.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90985915493 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61755521367 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.597183098592 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 560.7 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 84.4331688378 49.4020404114 171% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.2 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6666666667 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.53333333333 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 40.0 5.01903807615 797% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.319515141499 0.244688304435 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105934816235 0.084324248473 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106907844949 0.0667982634062 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188261808581 0.151304729494 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0774136072388 0.056905535591 136% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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