Some people think that museums should be enjoyable place to entertain people, while othere believe that the purpose of museums is to educate
In today's world, it becomes a controversial topic that museums should be enjoyable location to amuse people, while others believe that the purpose of museum to educate. Several people might have a bit knowledge about the advantages and disadvantages of both views or do not encourage function of museum became entertain public place while some others consider the purpose to educate. Both sides will be discussed, carefully.
On the one hand, made museum should be delighting place to entertain actually has several benefits to attract greater public interest to visit the museum. Firstly, everybody from various age have enjoyed the museum which developed with aim to entertain. Like art jogja museum with additional facility live music and children games succeeded become one of popular museum in Indonesia. Secondly, when the ambiance of museum was amusing rise value as family recreation destination. Those foundation urge organizer of museum in modern era provide a family gathering spot in around museum. Therefore spend spare time to enjoy museum was important family activity without afraid family members not amuse with that atmosphere. It is important became consideration by the private sector or the government as an investor be evolve sell value of the museum not only be a place to educate but fun place like a recreational destination
On the other hand, if some people had old principle that museum was spot to learn brought drawback an opinion visited museum was boring which only history buffs did. It is due to museum was a means literacy since the past. For the instance begin from education in the kinder garden in Indonesia, visited museum to learn was are mandatory subjects. Therefore inside the youth mindset museum was an ancient educate place. That carried till adult. But it is no doubt, important to revise the old consideration that many activity possible held in a museum except educate.
To sum up, personally I do not believe ancient judgement that museum only worth used to educate society not a place to have fun. I would like to take challenge to develop museum as interesting place that was able enjoyed by everyone. Even though violated old values from museum as place to educate specifically. However, it depends on an people which wants followed an ancient mindset or choosen add function of museum adjust the time
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, no doubt, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 41.998997996 136% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1978.0 1615.20841683 122% => OK
No of words: 386.0 315.596192385 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12435233161 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62345068369 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541450777202 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 660.6 506.74238477 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.1926081974 49.4020404114 148% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.105263158 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3157894737 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.42105263158 7.06120827912 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.512720005379 0.244688304435 210% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.157512319099 0.084324248473 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103420253747 0.0667982634062 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.334170090324 0.151304729494 221% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0968556827051 0.056905535591 170% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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